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People attend college or university for many different reasons (forexample, new experiences, career preparation, increased knowledge). Why do you think people attend college or university? Use specificreasons and examples to support your answer. v.2

People attend college or university for many different reasons (forexample, new experiences, career preparation, increased knowledge). Why do you think people attend college or university? Use specificreasons and examples to support your answer. v. 2
College or university plays a crucial role in shaping the future of students. Students from different backgrounds, age, pre college qualification and with different goals attend attend these education hubs for different reasons like for enhancing their knowledge and technical expertise, to get a different and challenging experience or to give their careers a proper direction. But a major chunk of these students join colleges to gain access to quality education that would help them in shaping their careers. University or college is the cornerstone to a career of a individual. Students, depending upon their interest, enroll in different courses like engineering, medical, law, arts etc. in a particular college. The education imparted in the colleges help students in understanding the real life situations and enhancing their knowledge, which ultimately helps them in getting a good job and a stable career. Getting a good career is the primary motive of student and colleges help them in getting there. Some people argue that students also join universities to have a different experience and to increase their knowledge. But that is true only for a small fraction of total student population. A person who has interest only in learning will not spend huge sums of money in a university and would never waste time and energy in getting into a good university in this world of cut throat competition. He or she can easily gain knowledge through some correspondence course supplemented by resolute self-study. Students strive hard to get in to a good university and further during their curriculum only to ensure that land up with a decent job or an assured and safe career ahead. To conclude, while there might be a mixture of people joining college with different backgrounds and motives, but that mixture is skewed towards people who join college or a university with a soel motive to ensure a good and a stable career for their future.
College or
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university
plays a crucial role in shaping the future of
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students
.
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Students
from
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different
backgrounds, age,
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pre college
qualification and with
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different
goals
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attend attend
these education hubs for
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different
reasons like for enhancing their
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knowledge
and technical expertise, to
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get
a
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different
and challenging experience or to give their
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careers
a proper direction.
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But
a major chunk of these
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students
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join
colleges to gain access to quality education that would
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help
them in shaping their careers.

University or college is the cornerstone to a
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career
of
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a
individual.
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Students
, depending upon their interest, enroll in
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different
courses like engineering, medical, law, arts etc. in a particular college. The education imparted in the colleges
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help
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students
in understanding the real life situations and enhancing their
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knowledge
, which
ultimately
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helps
them in getting a
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good
job and a stable
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career
. Getting a
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good
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career
is the primary motive of
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student
and colleges
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help
them in getting there.

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people
argue that
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students
also
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join
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universities
to have a
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different
experience and to increase their
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knowledge
.
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that is
true
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only
for a
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small
fraction of total
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student
population. A person who has interest
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only
in learning will not spend huge sums of money in a
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university
and would never waste time and energy in getting into a
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good
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university
in this world of
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competition. He or she can
easily
gain
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knowledge
through
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some
correspondence course supplemented by resolute self-study.
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strive
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hard
to
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get
in to a
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good
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university
and
further
during their curriculum
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only
to ensure that land up with a decent job or an assured and safe
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career
ahead.

To conclude
, while there might be a mixture of
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people
joining college with
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different
backgrounds and motives,
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but
that mixture
is skewed
towards
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people
who
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join
college or a
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university
with a
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soel
motive to ensure a
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good
and a stable
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career
for their future.
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41Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay People attend college or university for many different reasons (forexample, new experiences, career preparation, increased knowledge). Why do you think people attend college or university? Use specificreasons and examples to support your answer. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
319 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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