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Some people like doing work by hand Others prefer using machines Which do you prefer Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer v.2

Some people like doing work by hand Others prefer using machines Which do you prefer Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer v. 2
With the advent of industrial development, man has invented a large number of robots, high speed technology, and machines, which have ultimately become an integral part of our life. Despite these advancements there are people who still prefer to work manually by hand. But, in my opinion, doing work by machines is a better option as it reduces fatigue; saves time; and enables us to perform multiple jobs simultaneously. First, machines reduce fatigue. People no longer have to use their body, hand movements to perform everyday activities, hence they get less tired. As a result, they are more energetic throughout the day and can use this energy in some other constructive or productive jobs. For example, washing clothes by washing machines requires only limited number of activities like adding detergent, opening tap of water, setting timer, and shifting clothes. These activities require negligible effort compared to hand washing of clothes, which require continuous effort and is a lot tiring. Second, machine help in saving time. For example, microwave ovens help in cooking food items in a far less time compared to direct heating on a traditional gas stove. A bowl of rice takes only 5 minutes in a microwave oven compared to 20 minutes taken by a gas stove. Another example, photocopy xerox machines can quickly produce thousand of duplicate copies of paper. This is of immense help for teachers and students, who in the absence of xerox would have been forced to write those thousand of these pages by hand and would have wasted their precious time. Machines also help in doing multiple jobs simultaneously. For example, a person can put his clothes in washing machines and can set the timer for the required time. In the interim, that person can also cook food by placing food items in microwave oven for the required time. Once an activity is completed, modern day machines produce alarm to indicate that the job has been finished, hence reminding the person to finish that job. Besides, machines like mobile phone help an individual to perform multiple task like sending mails, listening to music, playing games for recreation simultaneously. A person can send mails, make presentations on his mobile, set reminders, prepare plans for the day etc. while he is on the way to his office. The benefit of doing multiple jobs makes an individual more efficient, which is not possible by doing manual work by hand. In summary, machines are beneficial as they reduce fatigue; help in saving a lot of time, which could be used for other productive activities; and help in doing multiple jobs simultaneously, hence making a person more efficient.
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man
has invented
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a large number of
robots, high speed technology, and
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machines
, which have
ultimately
become an integral part of our life. Despite these advancements there are
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people
who
still
prefer to work
manually
by
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hand
.
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But
,

in my opinion,
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doing
work by
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machines
is a better option as it
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reduces
fatigue; saves
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time
; and enables us to perform
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multiple
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jobs
simultaneously
.

First
,
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machines
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reduce
fatigue.
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People
no longer
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have to
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use
their body,
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hand
movements to perform everyday
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activities
,
hence
they
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get
less tired.
As a result
, they are more energetic throughout the day and can
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use
this energy in
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some
other constructive or productive
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jobs
. For
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example
, washing
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clothes
by washing
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machines
requires
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only
limited number of
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activities
like adding detergent, opening tap of water, setting timer, and shifting
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clothes
. These
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activities
require negligible effort compared to
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hand
washing of
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clothes
, which require continuous effort and is
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a lot tiring
.

Second,
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machine
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help
in saving
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time
. For
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example
, microwave ovens
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help
in cooking food items in a far less
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time
compared to direct heating on a traditional gas stove. A bowl of rice takes
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only
5 minutes in a microwave oven compared to 20 minutes taken by a gas stove. Another
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example
, photocopy xerox
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machines
can
quickly
produce
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thousand
of duplicate copies of paper. This is of immense
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help
for teachers and students, who in the absence of xerox would have
been forced
to write those thousand of these pages by
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hand
and would have wasted their precious time.

Machines
also
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help
in
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doing
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multiple
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jobs
simultaneously
. For
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example
, a
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person
can put his
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clothes
in washing
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machines
and can set the timer for the required
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time
. In the interim, that
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person
can
also
cook food by placing food items in microwave oven for the required
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time
. Once an
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activity
is completed
, modern day
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machines
produce alarm to indicate that the
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job
has
been finished
,
hence
reminding the
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person
to finish that
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job
.
Besides
,
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machines
like mobile phone
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help
an individual to perform
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multiple
task like sending mails, listening to music, playing games for recreation
simultaneously
. A
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person
can
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send
mails,
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make
presentations on his mobile, set reminders, prepare plans for the day etc. while he is on the way to his office. The benefit of
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doing
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multiple
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jobs
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makes
an individual more efficient, which is not possible by
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doing
manual work by hand.

In summary,
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machines
are beneficial as they
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reduce
fatigue;
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help
in saving
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a lot of
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time
, which could be
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used
for other productive
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activities
; and
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help
in
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doing
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multiple
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jobs
simultaneously
,
hence
making a
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person
more efficient.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
62Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people like doing work by hand Others prefer using machines Which do you prefer Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer v. 2

Essay
  American English
6 paragraphs
440 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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