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People attend college or university for many different reasons (for example, new experiences, career preparation, increased knowledge). Why do you think people attend college or university? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v.1

People attend college or university for many different reasons (for example, new experiences, career preparation, increased knowledge). Why do you think people attend college or university? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 1
In the modern era, the news media increased as well as improved day by day and provide worldwide information for everyone, so it is very crucial in our nation. I will explain the positive and negative impact of this statement in the upcoming paragraphs. To begin with, the news is very vital for individuals and spread wide range of information for everybody. For example, there are several television channels that broadcast news report in the positive way. For that reason, people read the newspaper daily and improve their knowledge skills in various fields such as education, politics, sports and Bollywood etcetera. Moreover, people can update herself day to day with getting daily basis news as well as spread awareness of real concern problems and making help to develop our country in an appropriate way. Thus, the news media play a vital role in everyone life. On the other hand, sometimes news media have an unfavourable impact on the masses life. For instance, news spread celebrity personal issues that reflect a negative effect on the people life. For that reason, new generation takes much interest to read about stars lifestyle and adopt some negative habit instead of gaining useful knowledge. In addition to this, people can choose what they want to see and nowadays technology has provided all types of data which is not beneficial for children and in small age groups of children quickly attractive with these types of news. So, in some situations news is worthless and influenced negative new youth. To conclude, news media are very significant in the entire world. However, news has influenced more positive effect on individual lifestyle.
In the modern era, the
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day by day and provide worldwide information for everyone,
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crucial in our nation. I will
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and
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impact of this statement in the upcoming paragraphs.

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with, the
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is
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very
vital for individuals and spread wide range of information for everybody.
For example
, there are several television channels that broadcast
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news
report in the
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positive
way. For that reason,
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people
read the newspaper daily and
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improve
their knowledge
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skills
in various fields such as education, politics, sports and Bollywood etcetera.
Moreover
,
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people
can update herself day to day with getting daily basis
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news
as well
as spread awareness of real concern problems and making
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help
to develop our country
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in an appropriate way
.
Thus
, the
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play a vital role in everyone life.

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,
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sometimes
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have an
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unfavourable
impact on the
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masses
life.
For instance
,
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spread celebrity personal issues that reflect a
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negative
effect on the
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people
life. For that reason,
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new
generation takes much interest to read about stars lifestyle and adopt
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some
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negative
habit
instead
of gaining useful knowledge.
In addition
to this,
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people
can choose what they want to
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see
and nowadays technology has provided all types of data which is not beneficial for children and in
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small
age groups of children
quickly
attractive with these types of
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news
.
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So
, in
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some
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situations
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is worthless and influenced
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negative
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youth.

To conclude
,
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are
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very
significant in the entire world.
However
,
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has influenced more
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positive
effect on individual lifestyle.
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IELTS essay People attend college or university for many different reasons (for example, new experiences, career preparation, increased knowledge). Why do you think people attend college or university? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
273 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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