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People are surrounded by advertisement which has an increase effect on our lives. Do you think the positive effect of this outweigh the negative effects? v.1

People are surrounded by advertisement which has an increase effect on our lives. Do you think the positive effect of this outweigh the negative effects? v. 1
In today's situation, people start to get attracted towards the advertisement and get benefitted by the valuable announcement. I would think not only abroadcast cause negative effect but also has a huge number of good things can find by the notice. This essay will describe the signs and how the people benefit from the announcement. Advertisement is meant for creating awareness of respective things, which is new to the market or an event which is going to happen outside an area. It can be either television exhibit, online promotion or a notice. It can be used for commercial use and welfare of the public. The main intention is to deliver the news to the public about a thing. For instance, individuals opting television in their leisure times. Hence, the popup of the information appears while watching programs might useful for the applicants who searching for the job. Secondly, the company's manufacturing the products that need to get hit in the market in terms of publication. Technology has been evolving, so we should effectively use the resource. Particularly, Business people make use of resources and get profited. For examples, if the notice of vaccination for the babies was not advertised, they would not get benefitted by the polio vaccination by the government which was mandatory at their earlier stage. Although, Television bulletin exists, some people have a television in their house was a dream. In that scenario, offline publicity like notice has been emerged. Some announcement deceived people and the situation become worsen, but that doesn't mean the broadcast was totally neglected. Ample of things people get gained from the placard. A lot of fraudsters are involved in a banking transactions, and the information about the security to safeguard the money is through advertising the people in terms of available resource. Apparently, I would say announcement makes a way to know things which is happening around the world. To sum up, literature increases the economic growth, creating awareness about the respective things and provided updating which is vital in these days. Hence, propaganda has a positive side that overbalance the negativeness.
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people
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get
attracted towards the advertisement and
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benefitted
by the valuable announcement. I would
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think
not
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abroadcast
cause
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negative
effect
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but
also
has a huge number of
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good
things can find by the
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notice
. This essay will
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describe
the signs and how the
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people
benefit from the announcement.

Advertisement
is meant
for creating awareness of respective things, which is new to the market or an
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event
which is going to happen outside an area. It can be either
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television
exhibit, online promotion or a
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notice
. It can be
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used
for commercial
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use
and welfare of the public. The main intention is to deliver the news to the public about a thing.

For instance
, individuals opting
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television
in their leisure times.
Hence
, the popup of the information appears while watching programs might useful for the applicants who searching for the job.

Secondly
, the
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company
's manufacturing the products that need to
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get
hit in the market in terms of publication. Technology has been evolving,
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so
we should
effectively
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use
the resource.
Particularly
, Business
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people
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make
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use
of resources and
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get
profited.

For examples, if the
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notice
of vaccination for the babies was not advertised, they would not
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get
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benefitted
by the polio vaccination by the
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government
which was mandatory at their earlier stage. Although,
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Television
bulletin exists,
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some
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people
have a
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television
in their
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house
was a dream. In that scenario, offline publicity like
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notice
has
been emerged
.

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Some
announcement deceived
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people
and the situation become worsen,
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but
that doesn't mean the broadcast was
totally
neglected. Ample of things
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people
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get
gained from the placard.

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A lot of
fraudsters
are involved
in a banking transactions, and the information about the security to safeguard the money is through advertising the
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people
in terms of available resource.

Apparently
, I would say announcement
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makes
a way to know things which is happening around the world.

To sum up, literature increases the economic growth, creating awareness about the respective things and provided updating which is vital in these days.
Hence
, propaganda has a
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positive
side that overbalance the negativeness.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
15Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
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IELTS essay People are surrounded by advertisement which has an increase effect on our lives. Do you think the positive effect of this outweigh the negative effects? v. 1

Essay
  American English
9 paragraphs
350 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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