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Some people think that economic progress is the only way to measure a country’s success, while others think that there are other factors which can be used to measure a country’s success. What are these factors? And among them, which one is more important than others? v.2

Some people think that economic progress is the only way to measure a country’s success, while others think that there are other factors which can be used to measure a country’s success. What are these factors? And among them, which one is more important than others? v. 2
It is considered that economic advance is the main criterion to evaluate the prosperity of a rustic. However, there are at least two factors by which a agrarian's achievement can be measured, and I describe them in this essay. One the one hand, economic progress is a valuable factor that can illustrate the progress of a rustic in terms of money, however, it shows the state of a bucolic just in the one criteria and does not correlate with other factors. Furthermore, some factors reflect the agrarian's achievement dipper than economic rise. First of all, technology breakthrough which influences different areas of life and allows to enhance such areas as medicine, education, social life and without doubt might be considered as a significant indicator of the provincial's achievement. Examples can be seen in such technology-focused countries as Germany or Japan, in which a huge part of people's work is accomplished by robots and machines. Hence these two countries have the developed economy and the happiest society in the world, which might be assumed as a gain. Another point is social evolution by which means the freedom of expression and human rights. For instance, in countries where people are under pressure due to their preferences and possessions, society performs the pure of happiest and it reflects the unsuccess of a rustic. By contrast, in countries in which there are no restriction of self-fulfilment nation flourishes and this cause of an agrarian prosperity. Admittedly, economic improvement illustrates the financial situation in a bucolic which also affects people's attitudes and reflect on which state population is developed. For example, it is proved that countries with a high GDP, population feel more confident and happier. Overall, economic strife is a beneficial circumstance to reflect the benefit of a county in the financial term but not accurate. Simultaneously with this factor, there are at least the other two which also might define a bucolic's advance.
It
is considered
that
economic
advance is the main criterion to evaluate the prosperity of a rustic.
However
, there are at least two
factors
by which
a
agrarian's achievement can
be measured
, and I
describe
them in this essay.

One
the one hand,
economic
progress is a valuable
factor
that can illustrate the progress of a rustic in terms of money,
however
, it
shows
the state of a bucolic
just
in the
one criteria
and does not correlate with other
factors
.
Furthermore
,
some
factors
reflect
the agrarian's achievement dipper than
economic
rise.
First of all
, technology breakthrough which influences
different
areas of life and
allows
to enhance such areas as medicine, education, social life and without doubt might
be considered
as a significant indicator of the provincial's achievement. Examples can be
seen
in such technology-focused
countries
as Germany or Japan, in which a huge part of
people
's work
is accomplished
by robots and machines.
Hence
these two
countries
have the developed economy and the happiest society in the world, which might
be assumed
as a gain.

Another point is social evolution by which means the freedom of expression and human rights.
For instance
, in
countries
where
people
are under pressure due to their preferences and possessions, society performs
the pure of
happiest and it
reflects
the
unsuccess
of a rustic. By contrast, in
countries
in which there are no restriction of
self-fulfilment
nation flourishes and this cause of an agrarian prosperity.

Admittedly
,
economic
improvement illustrates the financial situation in a bucolic which
also
affects
people
's attitudes and
reflect
on which state population
is developed
.
For example
, it
is proved
that
countries
with a high GDP, population feel more confident and happier.

Overall
,
economic
strife is a beneficial circumstance to
reflect
the benefit of a county in the financial term
but
not accurate.
Simultaneously
with this
factor
, there are at least the other two which
also
might define a bucolic's advance.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
19Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think that economic progress is the only way to measure a country’s success, while others think that there are other factors which can be used to measure a country’s success. What are these factors? And among them, which one is more important than others? v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
320 words
6
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