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1) Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People are never satisfied with what they have; they always want something more or something different. Use specific reasons to support your answer. v.1

1) People are never satisfied with what they have; they always want something more or something different. Use specific reasons to support your answer. v. 1
Science has improved dramatically through the years. New ways of learning have been developed as well. Most people argue that formal pen and paper examinations are not a good way to evaluate someone's educational success. I have to admit that in my opinion, there are better ways to assess someone's performance. Evaluating someone's performance by means of pen and paper examinations has undoubtedly several advantages. To set an example, by taking paper-based exams, the examination condition will be equal for everyone. Furthermore, a wide variety of questions can be designed, namely multiple-choice problems and essay tasks. However, it is a fact that these kinds of examinations would be proper to assess somebody's performance only when he or she is good with paper-based exams. In other words, a test-wise person would definitely outperform someone who is better at verbal or oral skills. Hence, I believe that there should be different types of examinations rather than only paper-based examinations to give everybody a fair opportunity. For Example, group projects can be given to measure someone's teamwork abilities. There is another point that I would like to mention. I believe that examinations should be continuous and exams should be taken several times over the school year. Otherwise, it is possible that someone who has done all the assignments perfectly would fail the single exam that is held at the end of the year because of the reasons which were beyond his or her control. To conclude, I agree that pen and paper examinations are not the best way to assess someone's abilities and skills. I believe that students should also be assessed verbally or orally. Other types of assignments such as group projects are also a good way to evaluate their teamwork abilities. In addition, exams should be continuous throughout the year rather than taking a single exam at the end of the year.
Science has
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improved
dramatically
through the years. New
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ways
of learning
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have
been developed
as well
. Most
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people
argue that formal pen and paper
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examinations
are not a
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good
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way
to evaluate
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someone's
educational success. I
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have to
admit that in my opinion, there are better
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ways
to assess
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someone's
performance.

Evaluating
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someone's
performance by means of pen and paper
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examinations
has
undoubtedly
several advantages. To set an example, by taking paper-based exams, the
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examination
condition will be equal for everyone.
Furthermore
, a wide variety of questions can
be designed
,
namely
multiple-choice problems and essay tasks.

However
, it is a fact that these kinds of
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examinations
would be proper to assess somebody's performance
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only
when he or she is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
with paper-based exams.
In other words
, a
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test
-wise person would definitely outperform someone who is better at verbal or oral
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skills
.
Hence
, I believe that there should be
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different
types of
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examinations
rather
than
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
paper-based
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examinations
to give everybody a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
fair
opportunity.
For Example
, group projects can be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
to measure
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someone's
teamwork abilities.

There is another point that I would like to mention. I believe that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
examinations
should be continuous and exams should
be taken
several times over the school
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
year
.
Otherwise
, it is possible that someone who has done all the assignments
perfectly
would fail the single exam that
is held
at the
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end
of the
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year
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because
of the reasons which were beyond
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his or her
control.

To conclude
, I
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agree
that pen and paper
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
examinations
are not the best
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
way
to assess
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someone's
abilities and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
. I believe that students should
also
be assessed
verbally
or
orally
. Other types of assignments such as group projects are
also
a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
way
to evaluate their teamwork abilities.
In addition
, exams should be continuous throughout the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
year
rather
than taking a single exam at the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
end
of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
year
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay 1) People are never satisfied with what they have; they always want something more or something different. Use specific reasons to support your answer. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
311 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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