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People are never satisfied with what they have; they always want something more or something different. use specific reasons and examples. do you agree or disagree. v.2

People are never satisfied with what they have; they always want something more or something different. use specific reasons and examples. v. 2
It is often said that desires never ends and people keep on wishing something which they do not possess. There are very few people who are content with what they have otherwise most are in race of procure or achieve something. I strongly believe that human being has tendency to get bored and look out for other things. First of all, basic habit of human is to explore the surrounding and beyond that the world which is unlimited to seek. People keep on getting new things and set out for another search which gives them a sense of doing and on achieving, a pride of achievement. This exploration almost applies in each and every field where human is associated with. For instance, medical scientists never get satisfied with new innovation in their field and always turn up for another research and such inquisitiveness gave so many modern techniques and medicines to the world. Nowadays, every year new technology in mobile and communication field is being launched and I certainly say such are the result of being discontent with what is already there. Secondly, the need of the humans is changed periodically and brings dis-satisfaction in the life which enabled to change the status quo. It is generally talked that requirement is the mother of inventions and change. In every walk of the life, changes can be seen and some creates the challenges for existing arrangements. For instance, I had bike when I was studying in class 8th and my hometown whole area was 5 sq km. However, I had to buy the car for commuting to work after 10 years as city spread abnormally in size. Another reason is marketing of the companies which influence the people to aspire for new items. This trend can be seen in cities where consumers spending grew 10% higher than other cities. To conclude, though satisfaction is best tool to live the life peacefully, innovation and inventions can be only be done when people start to be discontent with what they have.
It is
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often
said that desires never ends and
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people
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keep
on wishing something which they do not possess. There are
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very
few
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people
who are content with what they have
otherwise
most are in race of procure or achieve something. I
strongly
believe that
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human
being has tendency to
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get
bored and look out for other things.

This phrase is redundant. Consider using "first".
First of all
, basic habit of
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human
is to explore the surrounding and beyond that the world which
is unlimited
to seek.
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People
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keep
on getting
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new
things and set out for another search which gives them a sense of doing and on achieving, a pride of achievement. This exploration almost applies in each and every field where
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human
is associated
with.
For instance
, medical scientists never
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
satisfied with
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new
innovation in their field and always turn up for another research and such inquisitiveness gave
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so
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
modern techniques and medicines to the world. Nowadays, every year
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
new
technology in mobile and communication field is
being launched
and I
certainly
say such are the result of being discontent with what is already there.

Secondly
, the need of the
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humans
is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
changed
periodically
and brings dis-satisfaction in the life which enabled to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
the status quo. It is
generally
talked that requirement is the mother of inventions and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
. In every walk of the life,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
changes
can be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
seen
and
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some
creates the challenges for existing arrangements.
For instance
, I had bike when I was studying in
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
class
8th and my hometown whole area was 5 sq km.
However
, I had to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
the car for commuting to work after 10 years as city spread
abnormally
in size. Another reason is marketing of the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
companies
which influence the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
to aspire for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
new
items. This trend can be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
seen
in cities where consumers spending grew 10% higher than other cities.

To conclude
, though satisfaction is best tool to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
the life
peacefully
, innovation and inventions can be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
be done
when
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
to be discontent with what they have.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
13Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
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IELTS essay People are never satisfied with what they have; they always want something more or something different. use specific reasons and examples. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
338 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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