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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People are never satisfied with what they have; they always want something more or something different. Use specific reasons to support your answer. v.139

People are never satisfied with what they have; they always want something more or something different. Use specific reasons to support your answer. v. 139
It is often believed that it is a good characteristic for people to have a sense of competition in most cultures. In my opinion, competitiveness among employees is beneficial, however, this quality in daily life is more negative. This essay will describe how it affects to humans. On the one hand, having a sense of competition is positively in the working environment. In other words, competitions help people to grow professionally and make a career. According to the research of Harvard University, more than 75 percent of employees who was promoted in the first 3 years had sense of competition. Moreover, 9 out of 10 top managers compete with others. Therefore, I think that being ambitious in the workplace is a great trait, which helps to career. On the other hand, competitiveness in the daily routine is counted as being jealous. In other words, society does not accept envy human in their environment. For instance, according to the American Psychological Association, person, who always compares himself with others, starts to degrade. Especially, when the human wants to have the same cloth, stuff like "new iPhone" or "iMac", or even family, and wastes his energy to the negative emotions. People must compare himself only with him yesterday that is why I think is more negative quality. To conclude, however, most societies think that competitiveness is an advantageous personal skill, it depends on usage of quality in daily activity or workplace. So, competitiveness in the workplace is positive characteristics, but in routine life it is more negative.
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good
characteristic for
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people
to have a sense of
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competition
in most cultures. In my opinion, competitiveness among employees is beneficial,
however
, this quality in daily life is more
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negative
. This essay will
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describe
how it affects to humans.

On the one hand, having a sense of
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competition
is
positively
in the working environment. In
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words,
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competitions
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help
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people
to grow
professionally
and
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make
a career. According to the research of Harvard University, more than 75 percent of employees who
was promoted
in the
first
3 years had sense of
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competition
.
Moreover
, 9 out of 10 top managers compete with others.
Therefore
, I
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think
that being ambitious in the workplace is a great trait, which
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helps
to career.

On the
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other
hand, competitiveness in the daily routine
is counted
as being jealous. In
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words, society does not accept envy human in their environment.
For instance
, according to the American Psychological Association, person, who always compares himself with others,
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starts
to degrade.
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, when the human wants to have the same cloth, stuff like
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new iPhone
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iMac
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, or even family, and wastes his energy to the
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negative
emotions.
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People
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must
compare himself
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only
with him yesterday
that is
why I
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negative
quality.

To conclude
,
however
, most societies
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think
that competitiveness is an advantageous personal
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skill
, it depends on usage of quality in daily activity or workplace.
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So
, competitiveness in the workplace is
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positive
characteristics,
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in routine life it is more
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negative
.
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IELTS essay People are never satisfied with what they have; they always want something more or something different. Use specific reasons to support your answer. v. 139

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
255 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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