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Part 1: which newspapers and magazines do you read? - What kinds of article are you most interested in? - Have you ever read a newspaper in a foreign language? - Do you think reading a newspaper in a foreign language is a good way of learning the language? v.1

Part 1: which newspapers and magazines do you read? - What kinds of article are you most interested in? - Have you ever read a newspaper in a foreign language? - Do you think reading a newspaper in a foreign language is a good way of learning the language? v. 1
It is argued that countries should allocate more funds to literacy than to leisure and competitive games. It is agreed that national budgets should prioritise schools and universities over sports and play. This essay will discuss firstly, the economic benefits, education, discipline can bring to a nation and secondly, the social benefits it has; followed by a reasoned conclusion. Investment in its control system is one of the best ways to improve a country’s economy in the long term. The more students entering third level information, the more skilled a workforce will be and this leads to higher innovation and productivity. For example, South Korea and Finland took the decision to invest a large proportion of their budget on self-restraint and this has reaped benefits in the form of high-tech companies such as Samsung and Nokia. However, people cannot work hard all the time and these companies do provide leisure facilities for their workers. The study is not just about improving the economy, it also has many social benefits. Well educated people tend to be more aware of social evils such as drugs, alcohol and sexual health. For example, Singapore educates all of its citizens on the dangers of drugs and this has resulted in one of the lowest levels of drug abuse in the world. Despite this, sports can also teach children valuable soft skills, such as teamwork and work ethic which also help curb social ills. In conclusion, control should take precedence over sports when it comes to funding due to the many socioeconomic benefits it brings. It is recommended that governments continue to pump money into schools and universities in order to realise long-term goals.
It
is argued
that countries should allocate more funds to literacy than to leisure and competitive games. It is
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agreed
that national budgets should
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prioritise
schools and universities over sports and play. This essay will discuss
firstly
, the economic
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benefits
, education, discipline can bring to a nation and
secondly
, the
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social
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benefits
it has; followed by a reasoned conclusion.

Investment in its control system is one of the best ways to
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improve
a country’s economy in the long term. The more students entering third level information, the more skilled a workforce will be and this leads to higher innovation and productivity.
For example
, South Korea and Finland took the decision to invest a large proportion of their budget on self-restraint and this has reaped
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benefits
in the form of high-tech
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companies
such as Samsung and Nokia.
However
,
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people
cannot work
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hard
all the time and these
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companies
do provide leisure facilities for their workers.

The study is not
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just
about improving the economy, it
also
has
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many
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social
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benefits
.
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Well educated
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people
tend to be more aware of
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social
evils such as drugs, alcohol and sexual health.
For example
, Singapore educates all of its citizens on the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
dangers
of drugs and this has resulted in one of the lowest levels of drug abuse in the world. Despite this, sports can
also
teach children valuable soft
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skills
, such as teamwork and work ethic which
also
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help
curb
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social
ills.

In conclusion
, control should take precedence over sports when it
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comes
to funding due to the
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many
socioeconomic
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benefits
it brings. It
is recommended
that
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governments
continue to pump money into schools and universities in order to
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realise
long-term goals.
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IELTS essay Part 1: which newspapers and magazines do you read? - What kinds of article are you most interested in? - Have you ever read a newspaper in a foreign language? - Do you think reading a newspaper in a foreign language is a good way of learning the language? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
278 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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