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Part 1: 1. How well do you know the people who live next-door to you? 2. How often do you see them? 3. What problems do people sometimes have with their neighbours? 4. How do you think neighbours can help each other? Part 2: Describe a time when you were asked v.1

Part 1: 1. How well do you know the people who live next-door to you? 2. How often do you see them? 3. What problems do people sometimes have with their neighbours? 4. How do you think neighbours can help each other? Part 2: Describe a time when you were asked v. 1
The provision of the ordinary necessities of life, such as food and shelter for the refugees ought to be provided by the rich nations. This essay totally agrees with this statement because it is the human aspect of life and these vulnerable people can be useful later in life to the developed world. The reason why developed nations should render helping hand to the victims of war is to show them love. That is to say, these richer countries need to provide housing and foods for persons suffering from bad governance in under-developed states whenever they are being approached. Consequently, this singular act of benevolence will prevent these poor men and women from diseases due to malnutrition, cold and pneumonia. For instance, the United States of America assisted many refugees from South America every year and 65% of these people got settled in different communities before the end of 6 months. Another major reason why the richer countries ought to assist the victims of war is that they would use their talents for the host nations. This means that these people will turn to be a loyal citizen and use their knowledge or technical know-how to work and contribute to the existing economy when they eventually settled down. Most of the refugees in a foreign land used to be more diligent and committed than the son of the soil because they always feel they are the owner of their countries and they can do anything they feel. For example, Canada discovered that 60% of the refugees accepted between year 2000 and 2015 have now become degree holders which outnumbered the statistics of the Canadian citizens. In conclusion, assisting the poor and the homeless and getting loyalty, contribution from them to improve the economy are the vital reasons why the first world countries should not neglect them.
The provision of the ordinary necessities of life, such as food and shelter for the
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refugees
ought to
be provided
by the rich nations. This essay
totally
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agrees
with this statement
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because
it is the human aspect of life and these vulnerable
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people
can be useful later in life to the developed world.

The reason why developed nations should render helping hand to the victims of war is to
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show
them
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love
.
That is
to say, these richer
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countries
need to provide housing and foods for persons suffering from
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
bad
governance in under-developed states whenever they are
being approached
.
Consequently
, this singular act of benevolence will
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prevent
these poor
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
men
and women from diseases due to malnutrition,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
cold
and pneumonia.
For instance
, the United States of America assisted
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many
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refugees
from South America every year and 65% of these
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people
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got
settled in
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different
communities
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before
the
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end
of 6 months.

Another major reason why the richer
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countries
ought to assist the victims of war is that they would
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
their talents for the host nations. This means that these
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
will turn to be a loyal citizen and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
their knowledge or technical know-how to work and contribute to the existing economy when they
eventually
settled down. Most of the
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refugees
in a foreign land
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
to be more diligent and committed than the son of the soil
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because
they always feel they are the owner of their
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
countries and
they can do anything they feel.
For example
, Canada discovered that 60% of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
refugees
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
accepted
between year 2000 and 2015 have
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
now
become degree holders which outnumbered the statistics of the Canadian citizens.

In conclusion
, assisting the poor and the homeless and getting loyalty, contribution from them to
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improve
the economy are the vital reasons why the
first
world
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
countries
should not neglect them.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
Change your language and you change your thoughts.
Karl Albrecht

IELTS essay Part 1: 1. How well do you know the people who live next-door to you? 2. How often do you see them? 3. What problems do people sometimes have with their neighbours? 4. How do you think neighbours can help each other? Part 2: Describe a time when you were asked v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
306 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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