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Part 1: 1. What kinds of thing make you laugh? 2. Do you like making other people laugh? 3. Do you think it's important for people to laugh? 4. Is laughing the same as feeling happy? Part 2: Describe an idea you had for improving something at work or colle v.1

Part 1: 1. What kinds of thing make you laugh? 2. Do you like making other people laugh? 3. Do you think it's important for people to laugh? 4. Is laughing the same as feeling happy? Part 2: Describe an idea you had for improving something at work or colle v. 1
Nowadays, most people fail to achieve the Ideal work life balance. This essay will discuss some effects and also suggests ways to address this problem This issue is often associated with some unwanted consequences. Firstly, having an unhealthy work life balance can have a negative effect on people’s health since these individuals tend to sacrifice their daily physical activities and recreational activities to work. This in the long term will lead to an increased level of stress and stress-related illness. Secondly, work-life imbalance can also give rise to growing problems with parenting. The materialistic society of today drives many parents to become workaholics, which lead them to spending less time taking care of their children. Without adequate supervision from parents, children can easily go on the wrong track. Therefore, some practical solutions are suggested to mitigate the problem. One viable step is that people need to consider and see what makes them happy and then set priorities in life. When they come home from work, they must learn to switch the office button off. By doing so, they will have more time to enjoy leisure activities and refresh themselves. Furthermore, people should plan a flexible schedule for their life. For example, some days, they might focus more on work, while others might have more time and energy to pursue their hobbies or relax with their loved ones. This will enable them to enjoy every part of their life. In conclusion, work life imbalance can lead to some harmful impacts on people’s health and family, and some steps should be taken into account to mitigate this problem.
Nowadays, most
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balance. This essay will discuss
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some
effects and
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This issue is
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unwanted consequences.
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, having an unhealthy
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work
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balance can have a
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negative
effect on
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people’s
health since these individuals tend to sacrifice their daily physical activities and recreational activities to
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work
. This in the long term will lead to an increased level of
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stress
and
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stress
-related illness.
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give rise to growing problems with parenting. The materialistic society of
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today
drives
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many
parents to become workaholics, which lead them to spending less time taking care of their children. Without adequate supervision from parents, children can
easily
go on the
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wrong
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track
.

Therefore
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practical solutions
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to mitigate the problem. One viable step is that
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people
need to consider and
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see
what
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them happy and then set priorities in
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. When they
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come
home from
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, they
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learn to switch the office button off. By doing
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, they will have more time to enjoy leisure activities and refresh themselves.
Furthermore
,
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people
should plan a flexible schedule for their
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life
.
For example
,
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some
days, they might focus more on
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work
, while others might have more time and energy to pursue their hobbies or relax with their
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loved
ones. This will enable them to enjoy every part of their life.

In conclusion
,
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work
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imbalance can lead to
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some
harmful impacts on
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people’s
health and family, and
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steps should
be taken
into account to mitigate this problem.
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IELTS essay Part 1: 1. What kinds of thing make you laugh? 2. Do you like making other people laugh? 3. Do you think it's important for people to laugh? 4. Is laughing the same as feeling happy? Part 2: Describe an idea you had for improving something at work or colle v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
266 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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