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Do you read newspapers or magazines? - What articles do you like reading in a newspaper? - Why do you like them? - Have you ever read a newspaper in a foreign language? - Do you think reading a newspaper in a foreign language is a good way of learning the la v.1

Do you read newspapers or magazines? - What articles do you like reading in a newspaper? - Why do you like them? - Have you ever read a newspaper in a foreign language? - Do you think reading a newspaper in a foreign language is a good way of learning the la v. 1
Throughout history, animals and animal products have been utilized for human consumption, ranging from food production to investigation, as well as educational purposes. Some people are of the opinion that the need of livestock for human needs should be reduced while others believe that using them for human satisfaction is appropriate. This essay will discuss these views and also explain why the usage of other living organisms to satisfy ourselves is inappropriate. Some individuals are of the opinion that the exploitation of animals for food and investigation purposes is justified; most especially the ones at the bottom of the food chain. Their argument is that there are no alternatives. Indeed, getting a replacement for meat or beef is almost impossible. In addition, many biomedical discoveries were made possible because of the involvement of living organisms as models in research. Furthermore, proponents of this perspective are of the opinion that the use of animals when studying courses like zoology is indispensable. Hence, from these individuals' perspective, it is almost impossible to reduce our dependence on other creatures. However, other humans, myself included, think that exploitation of other living creatures should be drastically reduced. Animals are locked in zoos, treated unfairly, starved and used as a source of entertainment and money making revenue in the name of education. We often forget that these animals are breathing creatures with rights and whose feelings should be respected. Although the usage of animals in the investigation is indisputable, there are alternatives to using them. For instance, the recent advent of organized in biochemical research has proved to be a better model and has produced results significant as the former. Consequently, animal use should be reduced to the lowest point possible. In summary, the world today depends greatly on lower beings for various things. Some people believe that this is the way it should be; others argue that our dependence on animals should be reviewed. Thus, this essay discussed these points of views and also argued why we should minimize the use of animals.
Throughout history,
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animals
and
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animal
products have
been utilized
for
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human
consumption, ranging from food production to investigation,
as well
as educational purposes.
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Some
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people
are of the opinion that the need of livestock for
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human
needs should be
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reduced
while others believe that using them for
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human
satisfaction is appropriate. This essay will discuss these views and
also
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explain
why the usage of
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other
living organisms to satisfy ourselves is inappropriate.

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Some
individuals are of the opinion that the exploitation of
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animals
for food and investigation purposes
is justified
; most
especially
the ones at the bottom of the food chain. Their argument is that there are no alternatives.
Indeed
, getting a replacement for meat or beef is almost impossible.
In addition
,
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many
biomedical discoveries
were made
possible
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because
of the involvement of living organisms as models in research.
Furthermore
, proponents of this perspective are of the opinion that the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
of
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animals
when studying courses like zoology is indispensable.
Hence
, from these individuals' perspective, it is almost impossible to
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reduce
our dependence on
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other
creatures.

However
,
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other
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humans
, myself included,
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think
that exploitation of
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other
living creatures should be
drastically
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reduced
.
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Animals
are locked
in zoos, treated
unfairly
, starved and
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used
as a source of entertainment and money making revenue in the name of education. We
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often
forget that these
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animals
are breathing creatures with rights and whose feelings should
be respected
. Although the usage of
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animals
in the investigation is indisputable, there are alternatives to using them.
For instance
, the recent advent of organized in biochemical research has proved to be a better model and has produced results significant as the former.
Consequently
,
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animal
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
should be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduced
to the lowest point possible.

In summary, the world
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today
depends
greatly
on lower beings for various things.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Some
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
believe that this is the way it should be; others argue that our dependence on
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
animals
should
be reviewed
.
Thus
, this essay discussed these points of views and
also
argued why we should minimize the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
animals
.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay Do you read newspapers or magazines? - What articles do you like reading in a newspaper? - Why do you like them? - Have you ever read a newspaper in a foreign language? - Do you think reading a newspaper in a foreign language is a good way of learning the la v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
338 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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