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part 1: Have you ever been in very cold weather? Why? How often is the weather cold weather you come from? Are some parts of your country colder than others? Why? Would you prefer to live in a hot place or a cold place? Why? part 2: Describe a competition (e. g. v.1

part 1: Have you ever been in very cold weather? Why? How often is the weather cold weather you come from? Are some parts of your country colder than others? Why? Would you prefer to live in a hot place or a cold place? Why? part 2: Describe a competition (e. g. v. 1
Some people state that providing university places for a high number of young students is either impossible or useless. After explicating this argument, I agree to it because of following reasons. First and foremost, a degree from a top-tier academic institution is no longer a guarantee for a job, even in the knowledge-based society. A high majority of students decide not to attend to college, but work right after institute since hands-on experience and interpersonal skills via working are somehow more valuable and beneficial. Additionally, after years in the real work environment, they become experts in their fields and be capable of doing challenging tasks without any formal qualification. Bill Gates, for instance, the founder of Microsoft organization, chose to drop out of university, set up the Microsoft, and is recently recruiting technology prodigies for his company. On the other hand, only deserved and potential students are able to attend to college since its resources is not limited and they should be suitably and reasonably allocated. In fact, only academically talented students who already have a good grasp and disposition toward subjects they are learning will be capable of handling the immense workload and pressure at university as well as rarely find themselves being out of their depth. In Vietnam, the demand for acquiring knowledge and information has never ceased to grow, but it also leads to a high drop-out rate during academy time, especially much higher in tertiary education, since most students are easily bombarded with new knowledge, fall behind, and usually end up with dropping out of institute. Therefore, the acquisition of new knowledge is a key to success, and it should be only placed in academic high-flyers. In conclusion, I agree with the idea of allocating higher education for a high majority of students because of the above-mentioned opinions.
Some
people
state that providing university places for a
high
number of young
students
is either impossible or useless. After explicating this argument, I
agree
to it
because
of following reasons.

First
and foremost, a degree from a top-tier academic institution is no longer a guarantee for a job, even in the knowledge-based society. A
high
majority of
students
decide not to attend to college,
but
work right after institute since hands-on experience and interpersonal
skills
via working are somehow more valuable and beneficial.
Additionally
, after years in the real work environment, they become experts in their fields and be capable of doing challenging tasks without any formal qualification. Bill Gates,
for instance
, the founder of Microsoft organization, chose to drop out of university, set up the Microsoft, and is recently recruiting technology prodigies for his
company
.

On the other hand
,
only
deserved and potential
students
are able to attend to college since its resources is not
limited and
they should be
suitably
and
reasonably
allocated. In fact,
only
academically
talented
students
who already have a
good
grasp and disposition toward subjects they are learning will be capable of handling the immense workload and pressure at university
as well
as rarely find themselves being out of their depth. In Vietnam, the demand for acquiring knowledge and information has never ceased to grow,
but
it
also
leads to a
high
drop-out rate during academy time,
especially
much higher in tertiary education, since most
students
are
easily
bombarded with new knowledge, fall behind, and
usually
end
up with dropping out of institute.
Therefore
, the acquisition of new knowledge is a key to success, and it should be
only
placed in academic high-flyers.

In conclusion
, I
agree
with the
idea
of allocating higher education for a
high
majority of
students
because
of the above-mentioned opinions.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay part 1: Have you ever been in very cold weather? Why? How often is the weather cold weather you come from? Are some parts of your country colder than others? Why? Would you prefer to live in a hot place or a cold place? Why? part 2: Describe a competition (e. g. v. 1

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