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parents have to use their limited free time whether having fun with their children or helping them in their schoolwork v.2

parents have to use their limited free time whether having fun with their children or helping them in their schoolwork v. 2
It goes without any shadowing of doubt that parents have a responsibility to spend time with their children. In this hectic life that most of the people have a lot to do, there is a controversial argument that parents have to use their limited free time whether having fun with their children or helping them in their schoolwork. I, personally, subscribe to the idea that it is better to play with them. Such a communication among parents and children not only improve children' s mental ability but also bring an energetic atmosphere in families. To begin with, psychologically speaking, beyond the recreational aspect of games, they have an important role to increase mental activity. Games and sports bring children a priceless opportunity to learn how to be patient to become their turn during games, how to behave with their playmates and so forth. In my opinion, parents are more reliable individuals to be the source of such a training. For instance, my nephew, John, and my cousin, Sara, that are in the same age, grow up differently, Sara always played with her mother, but John had to do his schoolwork along with his mother. Now, Sara is as good as John in her education, but she equipped with many strong beneficial characteristics like sportsmanship, deduction and so forth all of which are very weakly in John. The very big difference among them has roots in their mother upbringing approach. Secondly, as we know, education is not what life is all about, I mean, there many other significant aspects of life some of which outweigh educational aspect of individuals' life like family relationship. If parents that have a little time to spend with their children and just use it for giving hand their children in their schoolwork, they would definitely lose the beyond the price blessing, their family relationship. Playing with children is a good way to make friendly communication with them. They can have fun with each other which provide them with a happy time. Such a spending time not only help adults to release their pressure of life, but also make children energetic. All of these outcomes of doing so make eventually the family members close together and a unique family. It is not to mention that children can deal with their school tasks by their teacher and even siblings' help, but they cannot experience such an atmosphere with anyone else except their parents. In summary, with taken all this into account, I do believe that if parents have a little time to spend with their children, playing games and sports instead of doing other things like school tasks with them would be most profitable choice. It has a lot of advantages for all family members like high mental abilities of children and happy air in families.
It goes without any shadowing of doubt that
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parents
have a responsibility to spend
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time
with their
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children
. In this hectic
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life
that most of the
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people
have a lot to do, there is a controversial argument that
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parents
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have to
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use
their limited free
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time
whether having fun with their
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children
or helping them in their schoolwork. I,
personally
, subscribe to the
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idea
that it is better to play with them. Such a communication among
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parents
and
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children
not
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only
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improve
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also
bring an energetic atmosphere in families.

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begin
with,
psychologically
speaking, beyond the recreational aspect of
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games
, they have an
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important
role to increase mental activity.
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Games
and sports bring
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children
a priceless opportunity to learn how to be patient to become their turn during
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games
, how to behave with their playmates and
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so
forth. In my opinion,
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parents
are more reliable individuals to be the source of such a training.
For instance
, my nephew, John, and my cousin, Sara, that are in the same age, grow up
differently
, Sara always played with her mother,
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but
John had to do his schoolwork along with his mother.
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Now
, Sara is as
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good
as John in her education,
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but
she equipped with
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many
strong beneficial characteristics like sportsmanship, deduction and
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so
forth all of which are
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very
weakly
in John. The
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very
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big
difference among them has roots in their mother upbringing approach.

Secondly
, as we know, education is not what
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life
is all about, I mean, there
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many
other significant aspects of
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life
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some
of which outweigh educational aspect of
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individuals&
#039;
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life
like
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family
relationship. If
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parents
that have a
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little
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time
to spend with their
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children
and
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just
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use
it for giving hand their
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children
in their schoolwork, they would definitely lose the beyond the price blessing, their
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family
relationship. Playing with
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children
is a
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good
way to
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make
friendly communication with them. They can have fun with each other which provide them with a happy
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time
. Such a spending
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time
not
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only
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help
adults to release their pressure of
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life
,
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but
also
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make
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children
energetic. All of these outcomes of doing
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so
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make
eventually
the
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family
members close together and a unique
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family
. It is not to mention that
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children
can deal with their school tasks by their teacher and even
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siblings&
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help
,
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but
they cannot experience such an atmosphere with anyone else except their parents.

In summary, with taken all this into account, I do believe that if
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parents
have a
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little
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time
to spend with their
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children
, playing
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games
and sports
instead
of doing other things like school tasks with them would be
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most
profitable choice. It has
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a lot of
advantages for all
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family
members like high mental abilities of
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children
and happy air in
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families
.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
39Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay parents have to use their limited free time whether having fun with their children or helping them in their schoolwork v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
468 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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