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One of the controversial issues related to professors is that whether or not they must allow students to use the internet connected devices in classes v.2

One of the controversial issues related to professors is that whether or not they must allow students to use the internet connected devices in classes v. 2
It goes without saying that in the cultural and educational aspects of individuals, professors play an important role. The teaching method and roles applied by them in universities' classes can lead students to flourish or languish according to how much they learn from. One of the controversial issues related to professors is that whether or not they must allow students to use the internet connected devices in classes. Even though many students are of the opinion that they must be admitted to use such a device, but, as one, strongly reject their idea for a bunch of reasons among which disrupting essence of the internet and disappearing of question and answer from classes are the most consequence ones. To begin with, as we know, by galloping rate of developing in technology and function of the internet, always there are accessible some new online-games most of which are very tempting for the young people like students. Considering this along with accepting that most classes are boring in students' eyes, if students had accessibility to the internet, they would definitely prefer to play a game instead of listening to their professors' lecture. Additionally, these days' young people are really addicted to social networks, so it is one another option of the internet for students rather than focusing on classes. For instance, the lowest score I got in university was for my biology class. Our teacher was not at all a restricted person. In fact, we are free in his class to use our phones to connect to the internet. During the semester, I completely was playing my favorite game in his class. I honestly learn nothing in this biology class, though our professor was the famous one in his field. Now, I think it was so because of disrupting property of the internet during class. Secondly, it is not to mention that by inventing technologies and internet most of the individuals, students are no exception, opt for solving their problem by searching through the internet not questioning from knowledgeable people. Regarding this approach, if professors take their students' using of the internet lightly, after a while their class will become with not questions and answers. Such a happening brings a lot of disadvantages for all listener in classes. It is crystal clear that some students in class are not able to think deeply or analyze matters immediately after teaching them. They almost can take benefits from their peers' questions in classes. Unfortunately, most of their classmates will look for their problem via the internet if they are allowed by professors. This big change carried by the internet can noticeably affect the level of most students' learning. On top of this, there is another problem caused by the internet accessibility in classes which is more harmful. It is likely for many of students that want to find the solution of their problem on the internet receive wrong one. A lot of things like misunderstanding, wrong online information and so forth to make such an outcome. Students will eventually finish their semester without grasping enough understanding of the issue which would undoubtedly obtain by asking question in classes. In summary, with all this taken into account, I do believe that it is not reasonable that students are permitted to use their devices with the availability to connect to the internet in class. This permission not only makes them unfocused in classes but also causes them to achieve less useful comprehension.
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to flourish or languish according to how much they learn from. One of the controversial issues related to
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professors
is that
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allow
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use
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classes
.
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students
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must
be admitted
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idea
for a bunch of reasons among which disrupting essence of the internet and disappearing of
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question
and answer from
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classes
are the most consequence ones.

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begin
with, as we know, by galloping rate of developing in technology and function of the internet, always there are accessible
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some
new online-games most of which are
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very
tempting for the young
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people
like
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students
. Considering this along with accepting that most
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classes
are boring in
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students&
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students
had accessibility to the internet, they would definitely prefer to play a game
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professors&
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people
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students
rather
than focusing on
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classes
.
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, the lowest score I
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got
in university was for my biology
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class
. Our teacher was not at all a restricted person. In fact, we are free in his
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class
to
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use
our phones to connect to the internet. During the semester, I completely was playing my favorite game in his
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class
. I
honestly
learn nothing in this biology
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class
, though our
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professor
was the
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famous
one in his field.
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, I
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think
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of disrupting property of the internet during
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class
.

Secondly
, it is not to mention that by inventing technologies and internet most of the individuals,
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students
are no exception, opt for solving their
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problem
by searching through the internet not questioning from knowledgeable
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people
. Regarding this approach, if
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professors
take their
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students&
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lightly
, after a while their
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class
will become with not
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questions
and answers. Such a happening brings
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a lot of
disadvantages for all listener in
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classes
. It is crystal
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clear
that
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some
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students
in
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are not able to
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deeply
or analyze matters immediately after teaching them. They almost can take benefits from their
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peers&
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questions
in
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classes
. Unfortunately, most of their classmates will look for their
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problem
via the internet if they are
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allowed
by
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professors
. This
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big
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change
carried by the internet can
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students&
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problem
caused by the internet accessibility in
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classes
which is more harmful. It is likely for
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many
of
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students
that want to find the solution of their
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on the internet receive
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wrong
one.
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things like misunderstanding,
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wrong
online information and
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so
forth to
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make
such an outcome.
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Students
will
eventually
finish their semester without grasping
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enough
understanding of the issue which would
undoubtedly
obtain by asking
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question
in classes.

In summary, with all this taken into account, I do believe that it is not reasonable that
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students
are permitted
to
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use
their devices with the availability to connect to the internet in
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class
. This permission not
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only
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makes
them unfocused in
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classes
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but
also
causes them to achieve less useful comprehension.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
37Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay One of the controversial issues related to professors is that whether or not they must allow students to use the internet connected devices in classes v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
576 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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