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Parents and teachers make many rules for children to encourage good behavior and protect them from danger. However, children would benefit from fewer rules and greater freedom. To what extend do you agree? v.1

Parents and teachers make many rules for children to encourage good behavior and protect them from danger. However, children would benefit from fewer rules and greater freedom. v. 1
Children are the building blocks of the nation and how they should be raised is a matter of utmost prominence. Parents and teachers think that they have become god and start governing children’s life by imposing numerous rules and to justify they say that they are guarding them from misshappening. On the contrary, it has rather detrimental effects on Mental and physical growth of children. Evidently, I see eye to eye with the central idea of this topic due to various reasons. The first reason is physical health. Supporters contemplate that if there are rules children will inculcate good behaviour, otherwise they will become thief and adapt ill habits such as drinking when grown up, which to some extent is true but, Consequently, they should not forget that excess of everything is bad. For example, my niece is being raised with vaster freedom very limited rules, she is active & holds first position in academics as well as choosing her extracurricular activities on her own. This brings to my second point, it is sometime said adolescents raised under strict rule are more likely to become disciplined & intelligent. On the contrary, it has been observed that restrictions make them submissive and in addition to it their brain remains under developed which in return limits their thinking pattern and can never think out of the box. Substantially, the research conducted by Indian Psychological institute reflects out of hundred fifty percent of children with more open environment were more creative than children with rules. To summarize, albeit I acknowledge rules are important for better understanding of right and wrong, without obstructing the growth of children. Parents and teachers should consider them as the bud of rose and should nourish the with love and care. Their role should be more of a facilitator than dictator.
Children
are the building blocks of the nation and how they should
be raised
is a matter of utmost prominence. Parents and teachers
think
that they have become god and
start
governing
children’s
life by imposing numerous
rules
and to justify they say that they are guarding them from
misshappening
.
On the contrary
, it has
rather
detrimental effects on Mental and physical growth of
children
.
Evidently
, I
see
eye to eye with the central
idea
of this topic due to various reasons.

The
first
reason is physical health. Supporters contemplate that if there are
rules
children
will inculcate
good
behaviour
,
otherwise
they will become thief and adapt ill habits such as drinking when grown up, which to
some
extent is true
but
,
Consequently
, they should not forget that excess of everything is
bad
.
For example
, my niece is
being raised
with vaster freedom
very
limited
rules
, she is active & holds
first
position in academics
as well
as choosing her extracurricular activities on her
own
.

This brings to my second point, it is sometime said adolescents raised under strict
rule
are more likely to become disciplined & intelligent.
On the contrary
, it has
been observed
that restrictions
make
them submissive and
in addition
to it their brain remains under developed which in return limits their thinking pattern and can never
think
out of the box.
Substantially
, the research conducted by Indian Psychological institute reflects out of hundred fifty percent of
children
with more open environment were more creative than
children
with
rules
.

To summarize
, albeit I acknowledge
rules
are
important
for better understanding of right and
wrong
, without obstructing the growth of
children
. Parents and teachers should consider them as the bud of rose and should nourish the with
love
and care. Their role should be more of a facilitator than dictator.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
12Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Parents and teachers make many rules for children to encourage good behavior and protect them from danger. However, children would benefit from fewer rules and greater freedom. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
302 words
6.5
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