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paid work. Some people regard this as completely wrong, while others consider it a valuable work experience, which is important for learning and taking responsibility. What is your opinion? v.1

paid work. Some people regard this as completely wrong, while others consider it a valuable work experience, which is important for learning and taking responsibility. What is your opinion? v. 1
Certain specialists believe that learning a foreign language at primary schools is preferable for children instead of starting at secondary school. This essay will argue that the benefits of this far outweigh the shortcomings. The essay will first demonstrate that it easier for children to absorb new languages earlier in life and that such learning enhances studies in other areas. This will be followed by an analysis of how the primary disadvantage, namely poor vocabulary development, is not valid. One major advantage for children who begin learning other languages earlier is that they can pick them up more easily. This is because younger children are at a formative stage and can absorb new information without much effort compared to older children or adults. Recent studies from the Early Childhood Learning Centre shows that the language learning ability of children is especially high between the ages of 0-10 years of age and at its peak between ages 6 and 7. Furthermore, studying international languages early stimulates a child’s curiosity. This consequently makes him more receptive to learning in other areas. For instance, a research carried out by Dr Sackler of the University of California has shown that bilingual pupils learned quicker than others and had superior performances in subjects such as Maths and Science On the other hand, those opposed to this believe that younger children who begin learning another language never develop a mastery in the vocabularies of both languages. They postulate that monolingual children generally master far more words in their native language than their bilingual counterparts. This stance is, however, unfounded as my Class 2 students who were brought up speaking both English and French, generally outperform their classmates in either subject. In conclusion, it is believed that it is best to teach new languages to students from elementary school, rather than later on. This essay believes that the benefits of this outweigh its disadvantages because languages are grasped quicker when learned early and that early language skills enhance studies in other areas.
Certain specialists believe that
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learning
a foreign
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language
at primary schools is preferable for
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children
instead
of starting at secondary school. This essay will argue that the benefits of this far outweigh the shortcomings. The essay will
first
demonstrate that
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it
easier for
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children
to absorb new
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languages
earlier in life and that such
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learning
enhances studies in
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other
areas. This will
be followed
by an analysis of how the primary disadvantage,
namely
poor vocabulary development, is not valid.

One major advantage for
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children
who
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begin
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learning
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other
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languages
earlier is that they can pick them up more
easily
. This is
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because
younger
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children
are at a formative stage and can absorb new information without much effort compared to older
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children
or adults. Recent studies from the
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Early
Childhood
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Learning
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Centre
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shows
that the
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language
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learning
ability of
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children
is
especially
high between the ages of 0-10 years of age and at its peak between ages 6 and 7.
Furthermore
, studying international
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languages
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early
stimulates a child’s curiosity. This
consequently
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makes
him more receptive to
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learning
in
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other
areas.
For instance
,
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a research
carried out by Dr
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Sackler
of the University of California has shown that bilingual pupils learned quicker than others and had superior performances in subjects such as
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Maths
and
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Science


On the
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other
hand, those opposed to this
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believe
that younger
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children
who
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begin
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learning
another
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language
never develop a mastery in the vocabularies of both
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languages
. They postulate that monolingual
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children
generally
master far more words in their native
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language
than their bilingual counterparts. This stance is,
however
, unfounded as my
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Class
2 students who
were brought
up speaking both English and French,
generally
outperform their classmates in either subject.

In conclusion
, it
is believed
that it is best to teach new
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languages
to students from elementary school,
rather
than later on. This essay believes that the benefits of this outweigh its disadvantages
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because
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languages
are grasped
quicker when learned
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early
and that
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early
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language
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skills
enhance studies in
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other
areas.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
One should not aim at being possible to understand but at being impossible to misunderstand.
Marcus Fabius Quintilian

IELTS essay paid work. Some people regard this as completely wrong, while others consider it a valuable work experience, which is important for learning and taking responsibility. What is your opinion? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
335 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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