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Overpopulation in many major urban centres around the world is a major problem. What are the causes of this? How can this problem be solved? v.2

Overpopulation in many major urban centres around the world is a major problem. What are the causes of this? How can this problem be solved? v. 2
Nowadays, Population is increasing at an alarming rate and, most of big cities are overcrowded. This issue has been facing globally for a few years and, there are several factors linked to it. I think certain positive steps are required to fix general issues of overpopulation. Most of the big cities are centred for education and industries. Although the country has benefited in terms of the economy, but people living there in polluted environments. For instance, Traffic is a famous problem as there are a lot of vehicles on the road and that too because of most of the masses located in one particular region. Mostly in urban areas, big shopping centres are situated for the general public to fulfil basic needs and, these markets can be seen full of crowd in working hours. Although it serves the requirements of nearby folks, but roads lead to those centres get stuck in rush hours. For instance, Universities and colleges are also located near to these places and usually students get late for class because of no rooms in these ways. If education centres and medical hospitals open in villages and small towns, a certain amount of crowd could be reduced in major cities. Although countryside areas have less opportunities for jobs, certain plants could be opened for facilitating those who change their location for finding a better life in the big towns. To conclude, There would be essential steps required to resolve the overpopulation problem in most urban areas and, both general people and government should be supported equally. I think the Government should provide some better policies in front of public by providing benefits in terms of markets, houses, jobs and education. It is considered effective, if wise decision would be taken by the general public as well.
Nowadays, Population is increasing at an alarming rate and, most of
big
cities
are overcrowded
. This issue has been facing globally for a few years and, there are several factors linked to it. I
think
certain
positive
steps
are required
to
fix
general issues of overpopulation.

Most of the
big
cities are
centred
for education and industries. Although the country has benefited in terms of the economy,
but
people
living there in polluted environments.
For instance
, Traffic is a
famous
problem as there are
a lot of
vehicles on the road and that too
because
of most of the masses located in one particular region.

Mostly
in urban areas,
big
shopping
centres
are situated
for the
general public
to fulfil basic needs and, these markets can be
seen
full of crowd in working hours. Although it serves the requirements of nearby folks,
but
roads lead to those
centres
get
stuck in rush hours.
For instance
, Universities and colleges are
also
located near to these places and
usually
students
get
late for
class
because
of no rooms in these ways.

If education
centres
and medical hospitals open in villages and
small
towns, a certain amount of crowd could be
reduced
in major cities. Although countryside areas have
less
opportunities for jobs, certain plants could
be opened
for facilitating those who
change
their location for finding a better life in the
big
towns.

To conclude
, There would be essential steps required to resolve the overpopulation problem in most urban areas and, both general
people
and
government
should
be supported
equally
.

I
think
the
Government
should provide
some
better policies in front of public by providing benefits in terms of markets,
houses
, jobs and education. It
is considered
effective, if wise decision would
be taken
by the
general public
as well
.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay Overpopulation in many major urban centres around the world is a major problem. What are the causes of this? How can this problem be solved? v. 2

Essay
  American English
6 paragraphs
298 words
6.5
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