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Now-a-days many people choose to be self-employed, rather than work for a company. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantage of being self-employed? v.2

Now-a-days many people choose to be self-employed, rather than work for a company. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantage of being self-employed? v. 2
In a world scenario where new ideas come up constantly, many would rather have their own business than work for a company. This essay attempts to consider the merits and demerits to be self-employed. The emergence of startups comes from young entrepreneurs who have good ideas and want to have their own business. This independence has several advantages which are very attractive such as work on your own terms, choosing your place and time of work. Moreover, financial income is higher than the salary of a company, making it possible to achieve financial independence faster. For instance, three young entrepreneurs opened a startup that produces human tissue from a biomaterial in Brazil. The three are able to reconcile master’s degree and work, and also one of them works from England. In addition, they have been received good financial income, and they are less stressed and happier. On the other hand, be self-employed may have some disadvantages. One of the most important is the lack of assurance of a guaranteed paycheck at the end of the month. In a few months, the entrepreneur can have money and other not so much, especially in the beginning. Furthermore, the amount of work is huge and the entrepreneur works day and night. Consequently, it's hard to reconcile the professional and personal life. For example, my friend has her own architecture office, and she always mentions that she worked until dawn to finish all the projects. In conclusion, be self-employed involve many pros and cons. However, if you have investment across industries or businessmen it can be a brilliant idea. Studies show that people who have their own businesses are more satisfied.
In a world scenario where new
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business than
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for a
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company
. This essay attempts to consider the merits and demerits to be self-employed.

The emergence of startups
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comes
from young
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entrepreneurs
who have
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good
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ideas
and want to have their
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own
business. This independence has several advantages which are
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very
attractive such as
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work
on your
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own
terms, choosing your place and time of
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work
.
Moreover
, financial income is higher than the salary of a
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company
, making it possible to achieve financial independence faster.
For instance
, three young
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entrepreneurs
opened a startup that produces human tissue from a biomaterial in Brazil. The three are able to reconcile master’s degree and
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work
, and
also
one of them works from England.
In addition
, they have
been received
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good
financial income, and they are less
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stressed
and happier.

On the other hand
, be self-employed may have
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some
disadvantages. One of the most
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important
is the lack of assurance of a guaranteed paycheck at the
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end
of the month. In a few months, the
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entrepreneur
can have money and other not
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so
much,
especially
in the beginning.
Furthermore
, the amount of
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work
is huge and the
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entrepreneur
works day and night.
Consequently
, it's
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hard
to reconcile the professional and personal life.
For example
, my friend has her
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own
architecture office, and she always mentions that she worked until dawn to finish all the projects.

In conclusion
, be self-employed involve
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many
pros and cons.
However
, if you have investment across industries or businessmen it can be a brilliant
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idea
. Studies
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show
that
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people
who have their
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own
businesses are more satisfied.
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IELTS essay Now-a-days many people choose to be self-employed, rather than work for a company. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantage of being self-employed? v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
277 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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