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Over the last few decades, there has been an increase in international tourism. Some people think that tourism is beneficial for local communities and should be encouraged. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.1

Over the last few decades, there has been an increase in international tourism. Some people think that tourism is beneficial for local communities and should be encouraged. v. 1
Over the years, technological development has made long-distance travel more convenient and safe. Their was a time when crossing geographical boundaries of one's native land was unimaginably difficult considering the amount of time and expenditure it entailed. But with the modern world order, where almost all the nations are well connected thorough a vast network of cheap airliners, maritime transport and superfast trains, taking a trip to foreign land for the sheer purpose of plasure have become much more common. But apart from creating wonderful memories for tourists, international tourism has been shown to have significant effect on the social and ecnomic life of the native communities. In this brief piece, I would argue that along with making rich contribution to the local cultural landscape and diplomatic relations between states, international tourism boosts native economy to a great extent and on the part of host countries, measures should be taken to sustain and increase the inflow of tourists. While visiting a foreign country, tourists avail a multitude of services such as accomodation, travel, hiring guides on certain occassions, taking part in local cultural rituals, etc. Also they tend to purchase a number of things either as memento or just to serve their daily needs. Together, all these different activities create a source of steady income for locals in tourist destinations, as many people make a living by providing services to the tourists in different capacities. Although in most places, the service providers take payment against their services in local currency, many nations allow travellers to make payment in American Dollar, or Euros which helps nation states belonging to continents other than these two to aquire foreign currency which is often beneficial for respective national economies. Thus international tourism serves two different purposes at once by creation of job and enriching economic prospects while also contributing to the foreign currency stock. On the other hand, when people of one nation visits another, they bring some elements of their own cultural practices into into the life of the local community, thereby creating possibilities for cultural transaction. It is not at all uncommon for the hosts and the tourists, who are there as guests in the foreign land to form friendly bond which has often proved to be beneficial in terms of human resource. And more often than not, it has also happened that some visitor has written their account of the land they visited, which allowed the local community to have a fresh insight into their own life from a different perspective and make explicit certain things which didn't appear to then as significant at all because they were all too familiat to things to notice it. Apart from this, people of one country visiting another is often taken as a gesture of peace and friendly relation between the respective states. This becomes especially significatant for the nations which have had tensed relation in the past or a history of violence between them. Therefore, in terms of cultural mixing and diplomatic relations, interntational tourism has been more often than not benifical not only for the host states, but also for the countries that incoming tourists belong to. In conclusion, recapitualting our arguments we can state with certainty that mobility of tourists accross international border helps sustain the local economy, creates job opportunities, serves national interest by facilitating inflow of foreign currency while at the same time providing a space for cultural mixing and forging diplomatic relation between states. And it goes without saying, that keeping the destinations tourist friendly and taking measures to enhance tourist experience would be to the best interest of the native community.
Over the years, technological development has made long-distance travel more convenient and safe.
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was a time when crossing geographical boundaries of one's
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native
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land
was
unimaginably
difficult considering the amount of time and expenditure it entailed.
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But
with the modern world order, where almost all the
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nations
are
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well connected
thorough a vast network of
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cheap
airliners, maritime transport and
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superfast
trains, taking a trip to
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foreign
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land
for the sheer purpose of
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plasure
have become much more common.
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apart from creating wonderful memories for
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tourists
,
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international
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tourism
has
been shown
to have significant effect on the social and
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ecnomic
life of the
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native
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communities
. In this brief piece, I would argue that along with making rich contribution to the
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local
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cultural
landscape and diplomatic
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relations
between
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states
,
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international
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tourism
boosts
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native
economy to a great extent and on the part of host
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countries
, measures should
be taken
to sustain and increase the inflow of tourists.

While visiting a
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foreign
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country
,
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tourists
avail a multitude of
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services
such as
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accomodation
, travel, hiring guides on certain
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occassions
, taking part in
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local
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cultural
rituals, etc.
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Also
they tend to
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purchase
a number of things either as memento or
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just
to serve their daily needs. Together, all these
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different
activities create a source of steady income for
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locals
in
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tourist
destinations, as
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many
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people
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make
a living by providing
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services
to the
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tourists
in
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different
capacities. Although in most places, the
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service
providers take payment against their
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services
in
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local
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currency
,
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many
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nations
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allow
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travellers
to
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make
payment in American Dollar, or Euros which
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helps
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nation
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states
belonging to continents other than these two to
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aquire
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foreign
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currency
which is
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often
beneficial for respective national economies.
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Thus
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international
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tourism
serves two
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different
purposes at once by creation of job and enriching economic prospects while
also
contributing to the
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foreign
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currency
stock.

On the other hand
, when
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people
of one
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nation
visits another, they bring
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some
elements of their
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own
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cultural
practices
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into into
the life of the
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local
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community
, thereby creating possibilities for
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cultural
transaction. It is not at all uncommon for the hosts and the
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tourists
, who are there as guests in the
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foreign
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land
to form friendly bond which has
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often
proved to be beneficial in terms of human resource. And more
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often
than not, it has
also
happened that
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some
visitor has written their account of the
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land
they visited, which
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allowed
the
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local
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community
to have a fresh insight into their
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own
life from a
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different
perspective and
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make
explicit certain things which didn't appear to then as significant at all
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because
they were all too
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familiat
to things to notice it. Apart from this,
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people
of one
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country
visiting another is
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often
taken as a gesture of peace and friendly
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relation
between the respective
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states
. This becomes
especially
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significatant
for the
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nations
which have had tensed
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relation
in the past or a history of violence between them.
Therefore
, in terms of
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cultural
mixing and diplomatic
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relations
,
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interntational
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tourism
has been more
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often
than not
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benifical
not
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only
for the host
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states
,
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also
for the
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countries
that incoming
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tourists
belong to.

In conclusion
,
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recapitualting
our arguments we can
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state
with certainty that mobility of
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tourists
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accross
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international
border
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helps
sustain the
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local
economy, creates job opportunities, serves national
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interest by
facilitating inflow of
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foreign
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currency
while at the same time providing a space for
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cultural
mixing and forging diplomatic
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relation
between
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states
. And it goes without saying, that keeping the destinations
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tourist
friendly and taking measures to enhance
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tourist
experience would be to the best interest of the
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native
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community
.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
85Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
19Mistakes
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IELTS essay Over the last few decades, there has been an increase in international tourism. Some people think that tourism is beneficial for local communities and should be encouraged. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
604 words
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Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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