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Buying things on the Internet, such as books, air tickets and groceries, is becoming more and more popular. Do the advantages of shopping in this way outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words. v.1

Buying things on the Internet, such as books, air tickets and groceries, is becoming more and more popular. Do the advantages of shopping in this way outweigh the disadvantages? v. 1
Shopping via cyber space is not uncommon nowadays. ALTHOUGH, purchasing online is more convenient, some people take a lot of time to the markets, in order to get better look of goods, they buy. In my opinion its better to do shopping on net instead of wasting a lot of time in malls. In the today s world of advanced technology, it is now easy to get everything online. Because whatever you want is, just a click away from you. For example, you want to purchase monthly grocery for your home, you will just open a webpage, select the items and you will be served with the best, at your doorsteps. Another example is, if some one needs a book on urgent basis and he and she does not know from where to get that he can search on web and order online. Which will be less time consuming and you can save your energy to read a book. So, the greatest benefit of buying things on internet is that it is time saving and more convenient than roaming around in markets. The main disadvantage of going through malls for the household is that it requires a lot of time, in addition, mostly it is not a single person job. The main challenges people face, are they do not get everything under a single roof, they have to search a lot to find what they actually want. For instance, if someone gets a single off in a week and he goes out on roads for purchasing he will come home wasted and his whole day will be gifted to shopping malls. Therefore, it is a best idea to save time then wasting it. To conclude, acquiring items online is a common practice these days, the main advantage is, it is more suitable while, tiring yourself in markets is just a wastage of time. In my opinion purchasing things on net is beneficial than going out in search of stuff.
Shopping via cyber space is not uncommon nowadays. ALTHOUGH, purchasing
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is more convenient,
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some
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people
take a
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lot
of
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to the markets, in order to
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get
better look of
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goods
, they
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buy
. In my opinion its better to
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do shopping
on net
instead
of wasting a
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lot
of
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time
in malls.

In the
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today
s world of advanced technology, it is
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now
easy to
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get
everything
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online
.
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Because
whatever you want is,
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just
a click away from you.
For example
, you want to
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purchase
monthly grocery for your home, you will
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just
open a
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webpage
, select the items and you will
be served
with the best, at your doorsteps. Another example is, if
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some one
needs a book on urgent
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basis and
he and she does not know from where to
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get
that he can search on web and order
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online
. Which will be less
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time consuming
and you can save your energy to read a book.
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So
, the greatest benefit of buying things on internet is that it is
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time
saving and more convenient than roaming around in markets.

The main disadvantage of going through malls for the household is that it requires a
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lot
of
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time
,
in addition
,
mostly
it is not a single person job. The main challenges
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people
face, are they do not
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get
everything under a single roof, they
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have to
search a
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lot
to find what they actually want.
For instance
, if someone
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gets
a single off in a
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week and
he goes out on roads for purchasing he will
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come
home wasted and his whole day will
be gifted
to shopping malls.
Therefore
, it is
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a
best
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idea
to save
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time
then wasting it.

To conclude
, acquiring items
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online
is a common practice these days, the main advantage is, it is more suitable while, tiring yourself in markets is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
just
a wastage of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
. In my opinion purchasing things on net is
Use "(beneficial)" to make a comparison with this adjective.
beneficial
than going out in search of stuff.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
15Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay Buying things on the Internet, such as books, air tickets and groceries, is becoming more and more popular. Do the advantages of shopping in this way outweigh the disadvantages? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
329 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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