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Over the last few decades there has been an increase in international tourism Some people thinks it is beneficial for local communities and should be encouraged To what extent do you agree or disagree v.1

Over the last few decades there has been an increase in international tourism Some people thinks it is beneficial for local communities and should be encouraged v. 1
Our environment is degrading at a rapid pace and preserving it of utmost importance now more than ever. A section of the society thinks that these problems must be tackled at a world level, while others differ and propose to handle them locally at the national level. This essay will discuss why changes should be suggested at the global level, but each nation should implement them and deal with their own issues separately by effectively applying a few solutions. Today we are suffering from numerous environmental problems like climate change and pollution to name a couple. Some people around the globe believe that an international organisation like the United Nations should intervene and handle them. Moreover, they firmly support the notion that such a body will be able to solve all these environmental hazards of the world. For instance, one way to reduce pollution substantially in all major cities is to put a mandatory cap enforced by an international body on the number of cars a city can have. This will in turn, decrease any major city’s suffocation from air and noise pollution everywhere. Therefore, many conceive that such stern actions can only be taken by an international organisation. Despite the above reasons, others think that every country should deal with their own environmental affairs as every country has a different problem and a different culture and even though the issue is the same, the severity differs. To give perspective, air contamination in Mumbai is worse than that in Boston and so are the habits and needs of the residents of these two cities. Therefore, both governments must work locally to eradicate it. Furthermore, each nation has its own economic constraints of what work it can carry out. These reasons bolster the idea of countries dealing with their own environmental issues. To conclude, it would be conducive if an intergovernmental body is tasked to guide governments by forming directives and standards, but the ground work to tackle the natural issues needs to be done by the locals themselves. I completely support the idea that countries must implement their own measures to alleviate environmental problems.
Our environment is degrading at a rapid pace and preserving it of utmost importance
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now
more than ever. A section of the society
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
thinks
that these
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problems
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
be tackled
at a world level, while others differ and propose to handle them
locally
at the national level. This essay will discuss why
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changes
should
be suggested
at the global level,
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but
each nation should implement them and deal with their
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own
issues
separately
by
effectively
applying a few solutions.

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Today
we are suffering from numerous
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environmental
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problems
like climate
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change
and pollution to name a couple.
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Some
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people
around the globe believe that an international
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organisation
like the United Nations should intervene and handle them.
Moreover
, they
firmly
support the notion that such a body will be able to solve all these
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environmental
hazards of the world.
For instance
, one way to
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reduce
pollution
substantially
in all major
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cities
is to put a mandatory cap enforced by an international body on the number of cars a city can have. This will in turn, decrease any major city’s suffocation from air and noise pollution everywhere.
Therefore
,
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many
conceive that such stern actions can
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only
be taken
by an international
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organisation
.

Despite the above reasons, others
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think
that every
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country
should deal with their
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own
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environmental
affairs as every
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country
has a
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different
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problem
and a
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different
culture and
even though
the issue is the same, the severity differs. To give perspective, air contamination in Mumbai is worse than that in Boston and
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so
are the habits and needs of the residents of these two
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cities
.
Therefore
, both
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governments
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must
work
locally
to eradicate it.
Furthermore
, each nation has its
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own
economic constraints of what work it can carry out. These reasons bolster the
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idea
of
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countries
dealing with their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
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environmental
issues.

To conclude
, it would be conducive if an intergovernmental body
is tasked
to guide
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governments
by forming directives and standards,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
the
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ground work
to tackle the natural issues needs to
be done
by the locals themselves. I completely support the
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idea
that
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countries
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
implement their
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own
measures to alleviate
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environmental
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problems
.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Over the last few decades there has been an increase in international tourism Some people thinks it is beneficial for local communities and should be encouraged v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
354 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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