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over-fishing has become a very common practice in many countries. what do you think are the effects of ever-fishing? use your own knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence v.3

over-fishing has become a very common practice in many countries. what do you think are the effects of ever-fishing? use your own knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence v. 3
Current hobbies of plenty people are fishing persistently, so that it turns to be the ordinary activity. Vast countries extend this activity into television programme, consideringly most of audience are being interested. Notwithstanding, I also see the other sides of over-fishing especially in a downside to prove over-fishing responsibility. First and foremost, fishing is normally useful to purpose in main profession like sailor. They intend to fulfil people consumptions and national income, likewise, traditional market system. Moreover, newest issue related to this topic is changing the function. From live supporting to become the favorite thing. Although seems positive, it provides malfunction unexpectedly. To demonstrate, many suspects are illegally sailing in harmful ways. Regarding to this, they intend to produce personal profit without saving sea heritage. Actually they are responsible for damaging the environment. By the same token, over-fishing beats addicted feeling in several generations. People would be thinking of about exploring their interest, yet never realised the impact. The way fish-catcher hunting was quite annoying, such as bombing or caged sea animals. However, dislodging other organisms is truly unaware deed. Even though the Government often warn and prohibit this harassment technic, but no one of the suspects are willing to response. Instead, the board is setting the strict rules and dispose the suitable punishment under this. Consideringly, many societies are stand for the Government to plan a whole preventive. To recapitulate, Over-fishing has a basic form in sailing and explain hobby. But in fact, it turns to be damaging wonderful biota, because of their sustainably process. Although, The Government are worthy needed to execute the regulations, society have to support this planning.
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Current
hobbies of
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plenty
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
are fishing
persistently
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
that it turns to be the ordinary activity. Vast countries extend this activity into television
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programme
,
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consideringly
Consider using "most audience" or "most of the audience".
most of audience
are
being interested
. Notwithstanding, I
also
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
see
the other sides of over-fishing
especially
in a downside to prove over-fishing responsibility.

First
and foremost, fishing is
normally
useful to purpose in main profession like sailor. They intend to fulfil
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
Possible spelling mistake found.
consumptions
and national income,
likewise
, traditional market system.
Moreover
,
A determiner is probably missing here: "the newest".
newest
issue related to this topic is changing the function. From
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
supporting to become the favorite thing. Although seems
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
positive
, it provides malfunction
unexpectedly
. To demonstrate,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
suspects are
illegally
sailing in harmful ways.
The phrase 'Regarding to' is not correct. Use "Regarding" or "regard to".
Regarding to
this, they intend to produce personal profit without saving sea heritage. Actually they are responsible for damaging the environment.

By the same token, over-fishing beats addicted feeling in several generations.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
People
would be thinking of about exploring their interest,
yet
never
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realised
the impact. The way fish-catcher hunting was quite annoying, such as bombing or caged sea animals.
However
, dislodging other organisms is
truly
unaware deed.
Even though
the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Government
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
often
warn and prohibit this harassment
Possible spelling mistake found.
technic
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
no one of the suspects are willing to response.
Instead
, the board is setting the strict
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
rules
and dispose the suitable punishment under this.
Possible spelling mistake found.
Consideringly
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
societies are stand for the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Government
to plan a whole preventive.

To recapitulate, Over-fishing has a basic form in sailing and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
explain
hobby.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
But
in fact, it turns to be damaging wonderful
Possible spelling mistake found.
biota
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
of their
sustainably
process. Although, The
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Government
are worthy needed to execute the regulations, society
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
support this planning.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
10Mistakes

IELTS essay over-fishing has become a very common practice in many countries. what do you think are the effects of ever-fishing? use your own knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
272 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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