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One problem faced by almost every large city is traffic congestion. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest? v.3

One problem faced by almost every large city is traffic congestion. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest? v. 3
Undoubtedly, in the fast paced era, the rise in vehicles plying on the roads has gone to a different level. Few individuals believe that to solve traffic and transportation related issues, people should be persuaded to settle in urban areas instead of living in the rural side; however, I totally disagree with the above notion because it can lead to overpopulation in cities and even more traffic issues. To commence with, migration of the people from surrounding areas can have detrimental effects on both population and environment. As, cities are already crowded and congested; it will be a next to impossible task to accommodate the migrants. Moreover, if, people from the countryside moved to cities, the limited resources in the cities will be at stake. For an instance, according the report by ‘The Times of India’, a South Indian town Chennai is almost running out of water, after near about 530 thousand dwellers from nearby places migrated there. To further support my viewpoint, dwelling of rural people in the cities will not only escalate the issues of traffic, but can also arise the problem of parking in the city. Because, it was a thing of the past, when people prefer to use public transport, but in the modern era, everyone has a private vehicle, that means more parking space will be required and the number of vehicles on the road will also increase in the urban areas, especially in the peak hours; resulting in more traffic. In conclusion, no doubt increase in day-to-day traffic is a topic of great concern, but I firmly hold the view that moving people of nearby places to the city is not its proper solution.
Undoubtedly
, in the
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fast
paced era, the rise in vehicles plying on the roads has gone to a
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different
level. Few individuals believe that to solve
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traffic
and transportation related issues,
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people
should
be persuaded
to settle in urban areas
instead
of living in the rural side;
however
, I
totally
disagree with the above notion
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because
it can lead to overpopulation in
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cities
and even more
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traffic
issues.

To commence with, migration of the
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people
from surrounding areas can have detrimental effects on both population and environment. As,
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cities
are already crowded and congested; it will be a
next
to impossible task to accommodate the migrants.
Moreover
, if,
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people
from the countryside
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moved
to
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cities
, the limited resources in the
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cities
will be at stake. For an instance, according the report by ‘The Times of India’, a South Indian town Chennai is almost running out of water, after near about 530 thousand dwellers from nearby places migrated there.

To
further
support my viewpoint, dwelling of rural
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people
in the
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cities
will not
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only
escalate the issues of
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traffic
,
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but
can
also
arise the problem of parking in the city.
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Because
, it was a thing of the past, when
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people
prefer to
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use
public transport,
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but
in the modern era, everyone has a private vehicle, that means more parking space will
be required
and the number of vehicles on the road will
also
increase in the urban areas,
especially
in the peak hours; resulting in more traffic.

In conclusion
, no doubt increase in day-to-day
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traffic
is a topic of great concern,
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but
I
firmly
hold the view that moving
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people
of nearby places to the city is not its proper solution.
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IELTS essay One problem faced by almost every large city is traffic congestion. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest? v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
280 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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