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One problem faced by almost every large city is traffic congestion. What do you think causes are? What solutions can you suggest? v.2

One problem faced by almost every large city is traffic congestion. What do you think causes are? What solutions can you suggest? v. 2
Traffic became the main problem for the every country. All the major cities are suffering from this problem these days. In my opinion, the main reason of this issue is most of the people are using their own transportation than public transportation. This essay will further elaborate the reasons of this trend and provide some solutions before forming logical conclusion. Analysing the statement, the first and foremost reason behind this trend is that the most of the people prefer to use their own vehicles, which is root of congestion on roads, because more vehicles on road cause more obstacles and city become more crowded. Additionally, another cause can be the poor management of roads and the broken traffic lights also become the ideal hitch for the blockage of the roads. Moreover, in most of the people in cosmopolitan cities go to work or return to their homes almost at a same time, which also become the issue of traffic jam on the road. On the other hand, there are some steps can be taken to tackle this complication, the most significant ones are the pooling method in which people can go to work and school together in one vehicle, which not only can reduce congestion, but also save money on petrol. Furthermore, if people only use public transportation during busy hour can also give relief to transit. In addition, if, authorities maintain the gridlock lights and also draw a separate lane for two wheelers and also for the public transport can halt this muddle To conclude, although jam becomes a major problem for metropolitan areas, but, if some measures can be used to reduce this swing than this complication would be solved.
Traffic became the main problem for the every country. All the major cities are suffering from this problem these days. In my opinion, the main reason of this issue is most of the
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people
are using their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
transportation than public transportation. This essay will
further
elaborate the reasons of this trend and provide
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some
solutions
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before
forming logical conclusion.

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Analysing
the statement, the
first
and foremost reason behind this trend is that the most of the
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people
prefer to
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use
their
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own
vehicles, which is root of congestion on
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roads
,
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because
more vehicles on
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road
cause more obstacles and city
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become
more crowded.
Additionally
, another cause can be the poor management of
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roads
and the broken traffic lights
also
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become
the ideal hitch for the blockage of the
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roads
.
Moreover
, in most of the
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people
in cosmopolitan cities go to work or return to their homes almost at a same time, which
also
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become
the issue of traffic jam on the road.

On the other hand
, there are
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some
steps can
be taken
to tackle this complication, the most significant ones are the pooling method in which
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people
can go to work and school together in one vehicle, which not
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only
can
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reduce
congestion,
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but
also
save money on petrol.
Furthermore
, if
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people
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only
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use
public transportation during busy hour can
also
give relief to transit.
In addition
, if, authorities maintain the gridlock lights and
also
draw a separate lane for
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two wheelers
and
also
for the public transport can halt this
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muddle


To conclude
, although jam
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becomes
a major problem for metropolitan areas,
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but
, if
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some
measures can be
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used
to
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reduce
this
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swing
than this complication would
be solved
.
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
13Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay One problem faced by almost every large city is traffic congestion. What do you think causes are? What solutions can you suggest? v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
282 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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