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One problem faced by almost every large city is traffic congestion. · What do you think the causes are? · What solutions can you suggest? v.1

One problem faced by almost every large city is traffic congestion. · What do you think the causes are? · What solutions can you suggest? v. 1
Nowadays, in the world of homogenisation, traffic jam has become increasingly a major existing crux for most demographics of society. Congestion caused by too much traffic on the roads and streets in major cities and towns all around the world. This issue will be discussed in this essay along with some possible solutions that may be implemented to alleviate the problem. More and more people are driving private cars nowadays than ever before. A major cause of this growing tend is cars have become more affordable for the average consumers and they are no longer a luxury item, and some families have even more than one. A further cause of this is that public transport is often inconvenient, overcrowded and unreliable in recent years. For instance, some busy cities such as Dhaka, New York, Beijing and Jakarta face too much traffic congestion during rush hour. Society has, in general, become more mobile and this means more people are prepared to commute to work by car than they were before. The government and public should be pragmatic about the actions that will solve this issue. First and foremost, there should be better infrastructure such as car sharing schemes, cycle lanes to encourage people to use bicycles instead of cars. In addition, ministry of transportation should estimate a budget for more frequent and comfortable buses and trains that would encourage people to use public transport. For example, Amsterdam, the capital of Netherlands, has no traffic problem as most of the people use cycle to work. Therefore, in order to eradicate traffic congestion, the administration as well as the multitude of any country should be aware of having a balance of vehicles. In conclusion, there are a variety of different factors that have led to rising levels of traffic in urban areas. This essay discussed how traffic congestion is often caused by availability of cars and poor public transportation facility. This essay also suggested that the solution to these problems is taking better steps by government and local public with a cooperation.
Nowadays, in the world of
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homogenisation
,
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traffic
jam has become
increasingly
a major existing crux for most demographics of society.
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Congestion
caused by too much
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traffic
on the roads and streets in major cities and towns all around the world. This issue will
be discussed
in this essay along with
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some
possible solutions that may
be implemented
to alleviate the problem.

More and more
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people
are driving private
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cars
nowadays than ever
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before
. A major cause of this growing tend is
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cars
have become more affordable for the average
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consumers and
they are no longer a luxury item, and
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some
families have even more than one. A
further
cause of this is that
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public
transport is
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often
inconvenient, overcrowded and unreliable in recent years.
For instance
,
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some
busy cities such as Dhaka, New York, Beijing and Jakarta face too much
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traffic
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congestion
during rush hour. Society has,
in general
, become more mobile and this means more
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people
are prepared
to commute to work by
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car
than they were
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before
.

The
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government
and
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public
should be pragmatic about the actions that will solve this issue.
First
and foremost, there should be better infrastructure such as
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car
sharing schemes, cycle lanes to encourage
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people
to
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use
bicycles
instead
of
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cars
.
In addition
, ministry of transportation should estimate a budget for more frequent and comfortable buses and trains that would encourage
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people
to
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use
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public
transport.
For example
, Amsterdam, the capital
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of Netherlands
, has no
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traffic
problem as most of the
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people
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use
cycle to work.
Therefore
, in order to eradicate
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traffic
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congestion
, the administration
as well
as the multitude of any country should be aware of having a balance of vehicles.

In conclusion
, there are a variety of
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different
factors that have led to rising levels of
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traffic
in urban areas. This essay discussed how
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traffic
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congestion
is
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often
caused by availability of
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cars
and poor
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public
transportation facility. This essay
also
suggested that the solution to these problems is taking better steps by
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
and local
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public
with a cooperation.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
27Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay One problem faced by almost every large city is traffic congestion. · What do you think the causes are? · What solutions can you suggest? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
339 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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