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Artists need a certain amount of freedom to develop their creativity. Some people think that artists should have total freedom to express any thoughts and ideas. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.7

Artists need a certain amount of freedom to develop their creativity. Some people think that artists should have total freedom to express any thoughts and ideas. v. 7
Art is the expression of ideas and imaginations which require a certain degree of freedom for artists to flourish their creativity. While other people think that artists ought to have complete freedom to express any thoughts and ideas. I would agree with the former argument that a certain amount of independence is necessary for expressing one’s ideas. To begin with, as the literal definition of art states that it is the expression of ideas and imagination, artists do require some autonomy when it comes to choosing the medium to exert their artistic capability. This allow artists not only to convey their ideas conveniently and comfortably but also take their creative skills to the next level. But it is commonly observed that in some conservative societies due to religious, political or cultural norms, certain art mediums such as dance, music, painting, and sculpture are discouraged. This not only deprives the creativity of artists and but also left them depressed and frustrated. However, it is also seen in some liberal societies where artists are granted unlimited freedom to express their thoughts on any topic of their choice, often ends up in chaos and unrest in the community. Some artists under the cover of freedom of expression often cross their limits and disrespect other people’s beliefs and ideologies. For instance, a couple of years ago, blasphemous cartoons published in Denmark and Norway hurt emotions of Muslims and caused aggression and hatred around the world. In conclusion, while other people’s opinions may vary, in my opinion, artist should have sufficient freedom to express their ideas through their medium of choice and respect other people’s beliefs and ideologies when exerting their thoughts.
Art is the expression of
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ideas
and imaginations which require a certain degree of
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freedom
for
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artists
to flourish their creativity. While
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other
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people
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think
that
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artists
ought to have complete
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freedom
to express any thoughts and
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ideas
. I would
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agree
with the former argument that a certain amount of independence is necessary for expressing one’s
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ideas
.

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with, as the literal definition of art states that it is the expression of
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ideas
and imagination,
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artists
do require
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some
autonomy when it
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comes
to choosing the medium to exert their artistic capability. This
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allow
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artists
not
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only
to convey their
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ideas
conveniently
and
comfortably
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but
also
take their creative
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skills
to the
next
level.
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But
it is
commonly
observed that in
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some
conservative societies due to religious, political or cultural norms, certain art mediums such as dance, music, painting, and sculpture
are discouraged
. This not
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only
deprives the creativity of
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artists
and
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also
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left
them depressed and frustrated.

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, it is
also
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seen
in
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some
liberal societies where
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artists
are granted
unlimited
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freedom
to express their thoughts on any topic of their choice,
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often
ends up in chaos and unrest in the community.
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Some
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artists
under the cover of
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freedom
of expression
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often
cross their limits and disrespect
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other
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people’s
beliefs and ideologies.
For instance
, a couple of years ago, blasphemous cartoons published in Denmark and Norway hurt emotions of Muslims and caused aggression and hatred around the world.

In conclusion
, while
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other
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people’s
opinions may vary, in my opinion,
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artist
should have sufficient
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freedom
to express their
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ideas
through their medium of choice and respect
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other
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people’s
beliefs and ideologies when exerting their thoughts.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
26Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
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IELTS essay Artists need a certain amount of freedom to develop their creativity. Some people think that artists should have total freedom to express any thoughts and ideas. v. 7

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
277 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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