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One of your pen friends wants to improve their English at a language school. they have never studied at a language school before and have asked for your advice on how to choose a good one. write a letter to your pen friend. advise them about the following v.1

One of your pen friends wants to improve their English at a language school. they have never studied at a language school before and have asked for your advice on how to choose a good one. write a letter to your pen friend. advise them about the following v. 1
TECHNOLOGY REVOLUTION HAS MADE OUR LIFE EFFORTLESS THAN BEFORE DUE TO VARIETIES OF OPTIONS. THIS ESSAY WILL COMPLETELY CONCUR WITH THE NOTION AND DISCUSS VARIOUS REASONS BEHIND THIS TREND. TO START WITH, THE PRIME REASON IS SCIENCE HAS MADE NEW INVENTIONS AND MANY PRODUCT WHICH IS AVAILABLE TO LESSER COST THAN ACTUAL COMMODITY. THUS, MIDDLE CLASS FAMILY AFFORD IT WITHOUT ANY HASSITATION. THIS ALSO BOOST THE INCOME OF THE EMPLOYERS AS WELL AS THE GOVERNMENT ECONOMY. THEREFOR, MANY OF US ENJOYING THIS NEW CHANG AND NEVER THINK OF THE FUTURE. MOREOVER, PEOPLE CAN TRY EACH ITEAM AND NEVER GET BORED WITH SAME TASTE. THIS ALSO SATISFY THEIR HUNGER WITH DIFFERENT TASTE ESPECIALLY IN THE FOOD VARIETY. FOR INSTANCE, FOOD DEPARTMENT SURVEYED SHOWN THAT THE PRODUCT INCREASED UP TO 40% SINCE DECADE. HOWEVER, THIS ALSO CONSIDER AS A NEGAIVE DEVELOPMENT BECAUSE, MORE COMMODITY AVAILABILITY LEADS TO WASTEAGE OF MORE MONEY. THIS LEADS TO FINACIAL IMBALANCE IN THE ONE'S FAMILY AND THEY MIGHT ATTEMPT UNLOWFUL ACTIVITIES LIKE, ROBBERY OR THEFT TO CO-OPERATE WITH THE CIRCUMSTANCES ESPECIALLY LOWER CLASS OR MIDDLE CLASS FAMILIES. FOR EXAMPLE, 50 5 OF THE YOUTH ARE ATTEMTING CRIME DUE TO SATISFY THEIR NEEDS AFTER SEEING MANY OTIONS TO BUY. IN CONCLUSION, I BELIEVE WHEN THERE IS MORE CHOICE, PEOPLE OFTEN GET CONFUSED AND HAVE CURIOSITY TO BUY WITHOUT LOOKING AFTER THE BUDGE. HENCE, IF WE GUID OUR CHILD IN A CORRECT WAY SINCE CHILDHOOD, THEN DEFINITELY THEI WILL UNDERSTANAD OF THE VALUES OF THE PRODUCTS AND USE THEM ACCORDING TO THEIR NEEDS.
TECHNOLOGY REVOLUTION HAS MADE OUR LIFE
Use "(EFFORTLESS)" to make a comparison with this adjective.
EFFORTLESS
THAN
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BEFORE
DUE TO VARIETIES OF OPTIONS. THIS ESSAY WILL COMPLETELY CONCUR WITH THE NOTION AND DISCUSS VARIOUS REASONS BEHIND THIS TREND.

TO
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START
WITH, THE PRIME REASON IS SCIENCE HAS MADE NEW INVENTIONS AND
Possible agreement error. The noun PRODUCT seems to be countable; consider using: "MANY products".
MANY PRODUCT
WHICH IS AVAILABLE TO LESSER COST THAN ACTUAL COMMODITY.
THUS
, MIDDLE
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CLASS
FAMILY AFFORD IT WITHOUT ANY
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HASSITATION
. THIS
ALSO
BOOST THE INCOME OF THE EMPLOYERS
AS WELL
AS THE
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GOVERNMENT
ECONOMY. THEREFOR,
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MANY
OF US ENJOYING THIS NEW CHANG AND NEVER
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THINK
OF THE FUTURE.
MOREOVER
,
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PEOPLE
CAN TRY EACH
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ITEAM
AND NEVER
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
GET
BORED WITH SAME TASTE. THIS
ALSO
SATISFY THEIR HUNGER WITH
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DIFFERENT
TASTE
ESPECIALLY
IN THE FOOD VARIETY.
FOR INSTANCE
, FOOD DEPARTMENT SURVEYED SHOWN THAT THE PRODUCT INCREASED UP TO 40% SINCE DECADE.

HOWEVER
, THIS
ALSO
CONSIDER AS A
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NEGAIVE
DEVELOPMENT
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
BECAUSE
, MORE COMMODITY AVAILABILITY LEADS TO
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WASTEAGE
OF MORE MONEY. THIS LEADS TO
Possible spelling mistake found.
FINACIAL
IMBALANCE IN THE ONE'S FAMILY AND THEY MIGHT ATTEMPT
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UNLOWFUL
ACTIVITIES LIKE, ROBBERY OR THEFT TO CO-OPERATE WITH THE CIRCUMSTANCES
ESPECIALLY
LOWER
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CLASS
OR MIDDLE
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
CLASS
FAMILIES.
FOR EXAMPLE
, 50 5 OF THE YOUTH ARE
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ATTEMTING
CRIME DUE TO SATISFY THEIR NEEDS AFTER SEEING
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MANY
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OTIONS
TO
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BUY
.

IN CONCLUSION
, I BELIEVE WHEN THERE IS MORE CHOICE,
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PEOPLE
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OFTEN
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
GET
CONFUSED AND HAVE CURIOSITY TO
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
BUY
WITHOUT LOOKING AFTER
After 'THE', do not use a verb. Make sure that the spelling of 'BUDGE' is correct. If 'BUDGE' is the first word in a compound adjective, use a hyphen between the two words. Note: This error message can occur if you use a verb as a noun, and the word is not a noun in standard English.
THE BUDGE
.
HENCE
, IF
Do not use a noun immediately after the pronoun 'WE'. Use a verb or an adverb, or possibly some other part of speech.
WE GUID
OUR CHILD IN A CORRECT WAY SINCE CHILDHOOD, THEN DEFINITELY
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THEI
WILL
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UNDERSTANAD
OF THE VALUES OF THE PRODUCTS AND
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
USE
THEM ACCORDING TO THEIR NEEDS.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay One of your pen friends wants to improve their English at a language school. they have never studied at a language school before and have asked for your advice on how to choose a good one. write a letter to your pen friend. advise them about the following v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
254 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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