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One of your penfriends is going to emigrate to Australia in a few months. They want to improve their English before they leave and have asked for your advice. Write a letter to your penfriend and give them advice on how to improve their speaking, listenin v.1

One of your penfriends is going to emigrate to Australia in a few months. They want to improve their English before they leave and have asked for your advice. Write a letter to your penfriend and give them advice on how to improve their speaking, listenin v. 1
Firstly, any new product that comes to the society will be promoted through advertisement as it is a major source to earn revenue. In order to reach a huge crowd new innovative measures and offers have been displayed and used. Therefore, marketing is done in a multiple ways like adverts, internet, mass media and cutouts. In the last decade, the new product was introduced to a specific set of elite people and based on their usage the popularity increases. But, nowadays, the new item is initially allowed to be more familiar with the Millenials by giving them free samples or offers. As a result of this approach, it not only enhances the benefits of it, but also takes it to the larger crowd online at a lesser cost. However, due to enormous options accessible to all generations, it leads to confusion. For instance, face wash is available at all forms and flavours most of which are unknown to human. In addition to that, business has come up with dangerous tactics to earn money by introducing certain illness or disease among people and introducing themselves as the healers. Not only that, but addition of certain drugs in extended amount rather than suggested by doctors has resulted in skin rashes or acne. Therefore, right understanding of needs and wants could wade of this confusion and unnecessary spending of money. In conclusion, certain analysis needs to be done whilst shopping whether is it really needed or does that benefit in the long run. However, only because of internet have made the world come closer and connect with each other. Therefore, initial discrimination of necessary and unnecessary things is needed to avoid chaos later.
Firstly
, any
new
product that
comes
to the society will
be promoted
through advertisement as it is a major source to earn revenue. In order to reach a huge crowd
new
innovative measures and offers have
been displayed
and
used
.
Therefore
, marketing
is done
in a multiple ways like adverts, internet, mass media and cutouts.

In the last decade, the
new
product
was introduced
to a specific set of elite
people
and based on their usage the popularity increases.
But
, nowadays, the
new
item is
initially
allowed
to be more familiar with the
Millenials
by giving them free samples or offers.
As a result
of this approach, it not
only
enhances the benefits of it,
but
also
takes it to the larger crowd online at a lesser cost.
However
, due to enormous options accessible to all generations, it leads to confusion.

For instance
, face wash is available at all forms and
flavours
most of which are unknown to human.
In addition
to that, business has
come
up with
dangerous
tactics to earn money by introducing certain illness or disease among
people
and introducing themselves as the healers. Not
only
that,
but
addition of certain drugs in extended amount
rather
than suggested by doctors has resulted in skin rashes or acne.
Therefore
, right understanding of needs and wants could wade of this confusion and unnecessary spending of money.

In conclusion
, certain analysis needs to
be done
whilst shopping whether is it
really
needed or does that benefit in the long run.
However
,
only
because
of internet have made the world
come
closer and connect with each other.
Therefore
, initial discrimination of necessary and unnecessary things
is needed
to avoid chaos later.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay One of your penfriends is going to emigrate to Australia in a few months. They want to improve their English before they leave and have asked for your advice. Write a letter to your penfriend and give them advice on how to improve their speaking, listenin v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
280 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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