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One of your penfriends wants to improve their English at a language school. They have never studied at a language school before and have asked for your advice on how to choose a good one. Write a letter to your penfriend. Advise them about the following: the teaching method, the number of students in a class and the number of hours a week v.1

One of your penfriends wants to improve their English at a language school. They have never studied at a language school before and have asked for your advice on how to choose a good one. Write a letter to your penfriend. Advise them about the following: the teaching method, the number of students in a class and the number of hours a week v. 1
Dear Niyi, Thanks for your letter. I think going to a language school is a great way to improve your English. As you know, I’ve done quite a few English courses, so you've come to the right person for advice. There are definitely a few points you should consider before you enrol in a course. The first thing I’d do if I were you is asking about the methodology. Some schools have you sitting in rows doing lots of written exercises. I don't think you should enrol at this type of school because lessons can be boring, and you don't get much oral practice. I'd suggest you choose a school that encourages lots of group work and speaking practice. You should check the school's brochure and talk to the staff and students if you can. Also, you ought to find out what the maximum class size is. If I were you, I wouldn't enrol in a class with more than 20 students because you won't get enough attention from the teacher. What's more, big classes tend to be mixed ability, so you may find the pace is too slow or too fast for you. I think between 10 and 15 students is a good number. And another thing you'd better think about is the intensity of the course. You could do an intensive 100-hour course in a month, but I wouldn't advise you to do this. If you've got the time, I think you should study over a longer period and allow yourself time to understand everything. Anyway, I hope this is useful. If you need any more information, just drop me a line. All the best, Osa
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going to a language
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improve
your English. As you know, I’ve done quite a few English courses,
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you've
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before
you enrol in a course.

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asking about the methodology.
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Some
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schools
have you sitting in rows doing lots of written exercises. I don't
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think
you should enrol at this type of
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school
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because
lessons can be boring, and you don't
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get
much oral practice. I'd suggest you choose a
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school
that encourages lots of group work and speaking practice. You should
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check
the school's brochure and talk to the staff and students if you can.

Also
, you ought to find out what the maximum
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class
size is. If I were you, I wouldn't enrol in a
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class
with more than 20 students
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because
you won't
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get
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enough
attention from the teacher. What's more,
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big
classes tend to
be mixed
ability,
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so
you may find the pace is too slow or too
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fast
for you. I
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think
between 10 and 15 students is a
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good
number.

And another thing you'd better
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think
about is the intensity of the course. You could do an intensive 100-hour course in a month,
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but
I wouldn't advise you to do this. If you've
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got
the time, I
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think
you should study over a longer period and
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allow
yourself time to understand everything.

Anyway, I hope this is useful. If you need any more information,
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just
drop me a line.

All the best,

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IELTS essay One of your penfriends wants to improve their English at a language school. They have never studied at a language school before and have asked for your advice on how to choose a good one. Write a letter to your penfriend. Advise them about the following: the teaching method, the number of students in a class and the number of hours a week v. 1

Essay
  American English
8 paragraphs
277 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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