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A friend you met last year has invited you to visit them in their country You have never been there before and need some information before you leave Write a letter to your friend In your letter request advice about a gift for his her family ask about act v.1

A friend you met last year has invited you to visit them in their country You have never been there before and need some information before you leave Write a letter to your friend In your letter request advice about a gift for his her family ask about act v. 1
Today, many youngsters are becoming drug addicted and indulging in illegal acts. Easy accessibility to alcohol and drugs and lenient behaviour of parents are the major reasons of this problem. Applying strict the rules on sale of alcoholic drinks, and putting a ban on drug sale in addition to supervision by parents on their children can solve this issue to some extent. These days, alcohol is easily accessible to the teenagers and various drugs are being supplied to the universities and other institutions by drug mafias, due to which many teenagers are getting addicted to these. Moreover, both parents being busy with their work, could not pay much attention towards their kids, as a result, youngsters are getting attracted towards these harmful habits. Lenient legal laws towards sale of these addictive drugs also play a major role in deteriorating this problem. These are many things that can be done to resolve this issue. Firstly, police and institutional management should enforce strict laws to keep the distributors of these drugs and alcohol far away from young people. There should be no grant to open any bar near the universities. For example, a survey shows that the college where there is a no bar or any alcohol shop near by, has the least number of students involved in illegal acts. Secondly, the parents should keep a close eye on every activity of their children, they should talk to them about the bad effects of using drugs and alcohol. Lastly, the government should make strict rules, and the defaulters should be given the hard punishments to make the society free from drugs. In conclusion, easy availability of drugs and alcohol to young people, and irresponsible behaviour of patents towards their kids are major reasons of the drug addiction, which leads to more crimes, and by putting strict rules on alcohol sale and harsh penalties on drug mafias with proper supervision of parents towards their kids can solve this problem.
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youngsters are becoming
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drug
addicted and indulging in illegal acts. Easy accessibility to
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alcohol
and
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drugs
and lenient
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behaviour
of
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parents
are the major reasons of this problem. Applying
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strict
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rules
on
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sale
of alcoholic drinks, and putting a ban on
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drug
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sale
in addition
to supervision by
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parents
on their children can solve this issue to
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extent.

These days,
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alcohol
is
easily
accessible to the
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teenagers
and various
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drugs
are
being supplied
to the universities and other institutions by
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drug
mafias, due to which
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many
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teenagers
are getting addicted to these.
Moreover
, both
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parents
being busy with their work, could not pay much attention towards their kids,
as a result
, youngsters are getting attracted towards these harmful habits. Lenient legal laws towards
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sale
of these addictive
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drugs
also
play a major role in deteriorating this problem.

These are
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things that can
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strict
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the distributors of these
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drugs
and
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alcohol
far away from young
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people
. There should be no grant to open any bar near the universities.
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, a survey
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shows
that the college where there is a no bar or any
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shop
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, has the least number of students involved in illegal acts.
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, the
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parents
should
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keep
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bad
effects of using
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drugs
and
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alcohol
.
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, the
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government
should
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strict
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, and the defaulters should be
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the
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hard
punishments to
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make
the society free from drugs.

In conclusion
, easy availability of
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drugs
and
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alcohol
to young
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people
, and irresponsible
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behaviour
of patents towards their kids are major reasons of the
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drug
addiction, which leads to more crimes, and by putting
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strict
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rules
on
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alcohol
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sale
and harsh penalties on
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drug
mafias with proper supervision of
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parents
towards their kids can solve this problem.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay A friend you met last year has invited you to visit them in their country You have never been there before and need some information before you leave Write a letter to your friend In your letter request advice about a gift for his her family ask about act v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
326 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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