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ome people think that everyone has the right to have access to university education, and that government should make it free for all students no matter what financial background they have. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion. v.1

ome people think that everyone has the right to have access to university education, and that government should make it free for all students no matter what financial background they have. with this opinion. v. 1
It is thought that studying at university is everyone’s right, and all tuition fees should be fully paid by the government. The former view is reasonable, however, I disagree that the government should take responsibility for students’ university education fees. I believe every student is entitled to go to college to acquire tertiary degrees. It is because, from my point of view, knowledge gained at university should be freely imparted to everyone. Furthermore, all students, although different in financial backgrounds, are equal in intelligence and scholastic capability, hence equal opportunities to gain admittance to university. However, the government are under no obligation to take care of university attenders’ education costs. Providing free tertiary education might either push the government to the verge of bankruptcy or levy higher taxes on citizens because the costs for the government to maintain facilities or employ qualified teachers are certainly exorbitant. Additionally, education quality would also suffer owing to the increased number of students in one class, which prevents teachers from giving out thorough care for everyone. In fact, class size also exerts a fairly significant impact on how each student interacts with teachers and their peers. If there are too many members in one class, they will be afraid to ask questions, for example, which leads to their poor performance at university. In conclusion, while I agree that it is everyone’s right to pursue tertiary education, it seems to me that the government should not fully pay for study costs. So far, there have been ample opportunities for scholarships or exemptions; and I think that is the best method to support students.
It is
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thought
that studying at
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university
is
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everyone’s
right, and all tuition fees should be
fully
paid by the
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government
. The former view is reasonable,
however
, I disagree that the
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government
should take responsibility for
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students’
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university
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education
fees.

I believe every
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student
is entitled
to go to college to acquire tertiary degrees. It is
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because
, from my point of view, knowledge gained at
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university
should be
freely
imparted to
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everyone
.
Furthermore
, all
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students
, although
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different
in financial backgrounds, are equal in intelligence and scholastic capability,
hence
equal opportunities to gain admittance to university.

However
, the
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government
are under no obligation to take care of
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university
attenders’
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education
costs. Providing free tertiary
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education
might either push the
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government
to the verge of bankruptcy or levy higher taxes on citizens
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because
the costs for the
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government
to maintain facilities or employ qualified teachers are
certainly
exorbitant.
Additionally
,
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education
quality would
also
suffer owing to the increased number of
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students
in one
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class
, which
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prevents
teachers from giving out thorough care for
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everyone
. In fact,
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class
size
also
exerts a
fairly
significant impact on how each
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student
interacts with teachers and their peers. If there are too
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many
members in one
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class
, they will be afraid to ask questions,
for example
, which leads to their poor performance at university.

In conclusion
, while I
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agree
that it is
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everyone’s
right to pursue tertiary
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education
, it seems to me that the
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government
should not
fully
pay for study costs.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
So
far, there have been ample opportunities for scholarships or exemptions; and I
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think
that is
the best method to support
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students
.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
25Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes
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IELTS essay ome people think that everyone has the right to have access to university education, and that government should make it free for all students no matter what financial background they have. with this opinion. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
268 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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