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Essay topics: Some people think that everyone has the right to have access to university education, and that governments should make it free for all students no matter financial background they have. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opini v.1

Essay topics: Some people think that everyone has the right to have access to university education, and that governments should make it free for all students no matter financial background they have. with this opini v. 1
Smoking has a detrimental effect on health, and all around the world consuming all tobacco products is a major issue for the public health. Some people think that the governments should restrict or ban them. I will discuss drawback and positive effect of banning smoking in this essay in my perspective. Clearly, to take care of the public health is a significant duty for the governments. One of the crucial problems is smoking, especially indoor consuming. It causes some death diseases such as breathing problems and other respiratory illnesses, even if lung cancer. It is believed that it is not only personal restriction, also the governments banning is necessary for decreasing consuming tobacco products. For instance, in a survey which has been done at a local university in Turkey, in the years 1980 between 2000, only 5 percent consuming cigarette had decreased important rate of respiratory illness among 1000 people. That is to say, if the illnesses wan to decline, the number of smokers is decreasing, too. On the other hand, some people believe that banned something is effected harmful to individuals. They insist everyone is responsible only their health. That is accurate in a way, but nobody should not affect the others. When a person smoke, all people are in there suffered with detrimental chemicals which in the cigarette, doubtless. Meanwhile, the governments should educate the people have that mentality to care about health issues are caused by smoking. In conclusion, although restricting smoking can not affect public health. The government should educate the people be aware both heath themselves and others in order to ban smoking indoors, even if be restricted sales.
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Smoking
has a detrimental effect on
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health
, and all around the world consuming all tobacco products is a major issue for the public
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health
.
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Some
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people
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think
that the
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governments
should restrict or ban them. I will discuss drawback and
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positive
effect of banning
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smoking
in this essay in my perspective.

Clearly
, to take care of the public
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health
is a significant duty for the
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governments
. One of the crucial problems is
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smoking
,
especially
indoor consuming. It causes
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some
death diseases such as breathing problems and
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other
respiratory illnesses, even if lung cancer. It
is believed
that it is not
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only
personal restriction,
also
the
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governments
banning is necessary for decreasing consuming tobacco products.
For instance
, in a survey which has
been done
at a local university in Turkey, in the years 1980 between 2000,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
5 percent consuming cigarette had decreased
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
rate of respiratory illness among 1000
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people
.
That is
to say, if the illnesses wan to decline, the number of smokers is decreasing, too.

On the
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other
hand,
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some
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people
believe that banned something
is effected
harmful to individuals. They insist everyone is responsible
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only
their
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health
.
That is
accurate in a way,
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but
nobody should not affect the others. When a person smoke, all
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people
are in there suffered with detrimental chemicals which in the cigarette, doubtless. Meanwhile, the
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governments
should educate the
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people
have that mentality to care about
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health
issues
are caused
by smoking.

In conclusion
, although restricting
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smoking
can not affect public
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health
. The
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government
should educate the
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people
be aware both heath themselves
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and others
in order to ban
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smoking
indoors, even if
be restricted
sales.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay Essay topics: Some people think that everyone has the right to have access to university education, and that governments should make it free for all students no matter financial background they have. with this opini v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
274 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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