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Older people often say that their life is better in the past than now v.1

Older people often say that their life is better in the past than now v. 1
Millennia have passed and lots of changes had occurred in contemporary's nature compared to the past. Elders believe that the world was a better place to live in the past rather than current, because in many ways like technology picture of the world is new and different. I appreciate the thoughts of older people what they feel and believe it's true. Nowadays, elder people are facing many obstacles because of busy and hard going growth, which changed the living and thinking style of the new generation. When older were younger they was working hard for achievements and goal, but the style of working was different easy and having time to spend with family. In contemporary's earth way of thinking and working have been changed, while working hard they want to achieve name and fame in society. Satisfaction seems far away and more burden will create more effect and stress to mind. In past people was enjoying their growth while working on fulfilling the dreams of their family, even though way of thinking, living and also in the matter of health it was better than contemporary. It is very realistic to see that people of the current's era tend to run behind money and fame to maintain their status in society. In these fast life people forget how to live and maintain their health and it create and many health problems like obesity heart problems and many more. People only believe in gaining goals and money, in past people only wanted to live their life with ease and comfort rather than establishing status in society. In the present - day's nation, people are behaving like a hungry, which will never obsolete. It concludes that old is gold and as per time growth style and behaviour will change dramatically with technologies and development. In future older people life seems difficult because they could not accept or digest those changes.
Millennia have passed and lots of
changes
had occurred in contemporary's nature compared to the
past
. Elders believe that the world was a better place to
live
in the
past
rather
than
current
,
because
in
many
ways like technology picture of the world is new and
different
. I appreciate the thoughts of older
people
what they feel and believe it's true.

Nowadays, elder
people
are facing
many
obstacles
because
of busy and
hard
going growth, which
changed
the living and thinking style of the new generation. When older were younger they
was
working
hard
for achievements and goal,
but
the style of
working
was
different
easy and having time to spend with family. In contemporary's earth way of thinking and
working
have been
changed
, while
working
hard
they want to achieve name and fame in society. Satisfaction seems far away and more burden will create more effect and
stress
to mind. In
past
people
was enjoying their growth while
working
on fulfilling the dreams of their family,
even though
way of thinking, living and
also
in the matter of health it was better than contemporary.

It is
very
realistic to
see
that
people
of the
current
's era tend to run behind money and fame to maintain their status in society. In these
fast
life
people
forget how to
live
and maintain their health and it
create
and
many
health problems like obesity heart problems and
many
more.
People
only
believe in gaining goals and money, in
past
people
only
wanted to
live
their life with
ease
and comfort
rather
than establishing status in society. In the present
-
day's nation,
people
are behaving like a hungry, which will never obsolete.

It concludes that
old
is gold and as per time growth style and
behaviour
will
change
dramatically
with technologies and development. In future older
people
life seems difficult
because
they could not accept or digest those
changes
.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
18Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay Older people often say that their life is better in the past than now v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
317 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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