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Some people prefer to live in a house, while others feel that there are more advantages to living in an apartment. Are there more advantages than disadvantages of living in a house compared with living in an apartment? v.17

Some people prefer to live in a house, while others feel that there are more advantages to living in an apartment. Are there more advantages than disadvantages of living in a house compared with living in an apartment? v. 17
People usually live in either houses or apartments. There are a certain group of people who believe that staying in a house is better than staying in an apartment because houses are more spacious and are often located in quiet areas. However, the disadvantages of living in houses are that unlike apartments, houses require more maintenance and the owner is the only person responsible for it. Also, security can be an issue if you live in a standalone house on a large plot. Even so, in my opinion, the advantages of living in a house outweigh the disadvantages. It is agreeable that apartments are usually located in the city and have easy access to grocery stores, public transport and restaurants. For instance, when I was living in an apartment in New York I had three grocery stores located in the same block, subway was a 2 minute walk from the building and all the pubs were less than 15 minutes away by cab. Additionally, there are at least two apartments on each floor so it was easier for me to connect with my neighbours if I needed them. However, it is the exact opposite, in the case of houses as there is quite a distance between two houses and one generally has to rely on private transport or cab to get about or to move about. On the other hand, houses have a larger area than apartments. They have space for gardens, porches, swimming pools and garages, which provide for a more comfortable living. Another advantage of residing in a house is that it is located in remote areas and is away from the hustle-bustle of the city. Recent studies revealed that people living in houses are less prone to stress-related diseases because they are more relaxed. In conclusion, while living in a house certainly has some downsides, it provides people with a relaxed and calm lifestyle along with abundant living space. Hence, in my opinion living in houses has more advantages than staying in apartments.
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. There are a certain
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of
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people
who believe that staying in a
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house
is better than staying in an
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apartment
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because
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houses
are more spacious and are
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often
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located
in quiet areas.
However
, the disadvantages of
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living
in
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houses
are that unlike
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apartments
,
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houses
require more maintenance and the owner is the
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only
person responsible for it.
Also
, security can be an issue if you
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live
in a standalone
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house
on a large plot. Even
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so
, in my opinion, the advantages of
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living
in a
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house
outweigh the disadvantages.

It is agreeable that
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located
in the city and have easy access to grocery stores, public transport and restaurants.
For instance
, when I was
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in an
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in New York I had three grocery stores
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in the same block, subway was a
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walk from the building and all the pubs were less than 15 minutes away by cab.
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on each floor
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so
it was easier for me to connect with my
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as there is quite a distance between two
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On the other hand
,
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have a larger area than
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. They have space for gardens, porches, swimming pools and garages, which provide for a more comfortable
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living
. Another advantage of residing in a
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is that it is
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located
in remote areas and is away from the hustle-bustle of the city. Recent studies revealed that
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people
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living
in
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are less prone to
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stress
-related diseases
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because
they are more relaxed.

In conclusion
, while
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certainly
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downsides, it provides
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with a relaxed and calm lifestyle along with abundant
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space.
Hence
, in my opinion
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living
in
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houses
has more advantages than staying in
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apartments
.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
38Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people prefer to live in a house, while others feel that there are more advantages to living in an apartment. Are there more advantages than disadvantages of living in a house compared with living in an apartment? v. 17

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
336 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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