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Nowadays most people are not as fit and active, as they were in the past. What are the main causes of this situation? Suggest some possible solutions. v.11

Nowadays most people are not as fit and active, as they were in the past. What are the main causes of this situation? Suggest some possible solutions. v. 11
In today' s modern era, population is burgeoning at an alarming rate. Varieties of food and snacks are increasing day by day and so people are eating unhealthy food, which leads them to the path of obesity. Many pupils are not as healthy as compared to the past. In this essay, I intend to analyse the problems affecting the situations and suggest some ways to ameliorate them. There are many reasons why people in today' s world are not as healthy as they used to be. Firstly, in early days there had been limited resources for food and every day people used to eat same food which bored them. So, people started developing the taste buds by mixing one food with another or by increasing the usage of ingredients to make it spicy. Moreover, with the lapse of time, varieties of dishes where available in the market. Despite of knowing that unhealthy nutritional value, still people continued eating high calorific food eating this junk food and dishes are the main cause of increasing obesity. However, one cannot undone what is already done but can take care after knowing the detrimental effect it has on health. First of all eating is not the problem but having right choice about food is the solution. Increasing taste buds should be controlled by people to stay healthy. Furthermore, people should avoid consuming junk food every day and instead can eat once in a week to satisfied their urge. Continuing consumption of unhealthy food leads to disease and in some cases also deaths. So people should consider their health as priority. In conclusion number of increasing junk food and taste buds among people are inextricable. Whether it should avoid it or consume it is on their own. Controlling your taste-bud is the most effective method to avoid this unhealthy lifestyle.
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#039; s modern era, population is burgeoning at an alarming rate. Varieties of
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food
and snacks are
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increasing
day by day and
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so
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people
are
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eating
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unhealthy
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food
, which leads them to the path of obesity.
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Many
pupils are not as healthy as compared to the past. In this essay, I intend to
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analyse
the problems affecting the situations and suggest
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some
ways to ameliorate them.

There are
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many
reasons why
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people
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today&
#039; s world are not as healthy as they
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used
to be.
Firstly
, in early days there had
been limited
resources for
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food
and every day
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people
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used
to eat same
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food
which bored them.
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So
,
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people
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started
developing the taste buds by mixing one
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food
with another or by
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increasing
the usage of ingredients to
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make
it spicy.
Moreover
, with the lapse of time, varieties of dishes where available in the market.
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Despite of
knowing that
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unhealthy
nutritional value,
still
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people
continued
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eating
high calorific
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food
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eating
this junk
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food
and dishes are the main cause of
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increasing
obesity.

However
, one cannot undone what is already done
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but
can take care after knowing the detrimental effect it has on health.
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eating
is not the problem
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but
having right choice about
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food
is the solution.
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Increasing
taste buds should
be controlled
by
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people
to stay healthy.
Furthermore
,
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people
should avoid consuming junk
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food
every day and
instead
can eat once in a week to satisfied their urge. Continuing consumption of
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unhealthy
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food
leads to disease and in
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some
cases
also
deaths.
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So
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people
should consider their health as priority.

In conclusion
number of
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increasing
junk
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food
and taste buds among
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people
are inextricable. Whether it should avoid it or consume it is on their
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own
. Controlling your taste-bud is the most effective method to avoid this
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unhealthy
lifestyle.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
33Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS essay Nowadays most people are not as fit and active, as they were in the past. What are the main causes of this situation? Suggest some possible solutions. v. 11

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
305 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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