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Some students prefer to do group projects. Other students prefer to do individual projects. Which kind of projects do you think produce more learning and why? v.1

Some students prefer to do group projects. Other students prefer to do individual projects. Which kind of projects do you think produce more learning and why? v. 1
Imprisonment has been a popular and traditional method to fight crimes for centuries, but recently it has been challenged by the fact that this method does not work in some cases. While many people are persuaded that disciplining criminals through education and training is a better alternative to reduce crimes, I disagree with this sentiment to a certain degree. I believe that prison, at some points, still has an important role in the criminal justice system. In this essay, I will give some arguments to support my ideas. There are two reasons why I partly concur with the statement that sending outlaws to jail still provides several benefits to the common people. First and foremost, some individuals are born violent who cannot redeem themselves merely through studying and thus should be removed from their normal lives to avoid further harm. In the history of criminal profiling and criminology, criminologists have discovered a consistent pattern summarized from many cases of real-life serial killers. This pattern showed that many infamous serial killers, such as Monte Rissell or Ed Kemper, were sent to mental institutions for educating purpose and successfully convinced their counselors that they were getting well. As a result, these dangerous criminals were released back to society and went on a murder spree, reported committing more crimes. They only stopped killing people when being incarcerated for life sentences in correctional facilities. Moreover, many victims or families' victims do not believe that the offenders deserve redemption, so they would seek vengeance on their own with brutal methods which would create endless vendettas. Conversely, it must be said that the aforementioned arguments do not apply to every situation. Firstly, incarceration is not suitable for all types of criminal offences, especially juvenile crimes or those who do not receive a life sentence. Being isolated from the community for a while with no academic certificates or proper professions, by the time the offenders are released from prison, they are no longer qualified to work and discriminated against by other people in their community due to their shady past, despite still being at their working age. Consequently, these offenders will struggle to reintegrate back into society and are easily tempted to go back to commit illegal acts. According to statistics, over 75% of released prisoners are rearrested within five years of being released from the criminal justice system. A better solution, in this case, would be to train and educate criminals, rather than locking them behind bars. Furthermore, establishing educational programs for criminals without arresting them will prevent the disruption of the economic system, reduce the loss of the employment market and create more opportunities for these kinds of people to right their wrongs and finally become a productive person in their communities. In conclusion, the question about the efficiency of imprisonment and pedagogy as a better alternative is contentious with no easy answers. To my mind, the confinement of unlawful individuals gives a lot of benefits in reducing outlawed activities and ensuring the safety of each citizen. In the end, imprisonment is still the most effective way to deal with criminals and satisfy the victims’ desire for retribution under the authority of the state. But the states should try to introduce new ways to fight crimes such as education and training to achieve better results, instead of relying too much on the incarceration, which still has flaws.
Imprisonment has been a popular and traditional method to fight
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crimes
for centuries,
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but
recently it has
been challenged
by the fact that this method does not work in
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some
cases. While
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many
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people
are persuaded
that disciplining
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criminals
through education and training is a
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better
alternative to
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reduce
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crimes
, I disagree with this sentiment to a certain degree. I believe that prison, at
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some
points,
still
has an
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important
role in the
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criminal
justice system. In this essay, I will give
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some
arguments to support my
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ideas
.

There are two reasons why I partly concur with the statement that sending outlaws to jail
still
provides several benefits to the common
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people
.
First
and foremost,
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some
individuals
are born
violent who cannot redeem themselves
merely
through studying and
thus
should
be removed
from their normal
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lives
to avoid
further
harm. In the history of
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criminal
profiling and criminology, criminologists have discovered a consistent pattern summarized from
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many
cases of real-life serial killers. This pattern
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
showed
that
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many
infamous serial killers, such as Monte
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Rissell
or Ed
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Kemper
, were
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sent
to mental institutions for educating purpose and
successfully
convinced their counselors that they were getting well.
As a result
, these
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dangerous
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criminals
were
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released
back to society and went on a murder spree, reported committing more
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crimes
. They
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only
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stopped
killing
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people
when
being incarcerated
for life sentences in correctional facilities.
Moreover
,
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many
victims or families' victims do not believe that the offenders deserve redemption,
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so
they would seek vengeance on their
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own
with brutal methods which would create endless vendettas.

Conversely
, it
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must
be said
that the aforementioned arguments do not apply to every situation.
Firstly
, incarceration is not suitable for all types of
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criminal
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offences
,
especially
juvenile
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crimes
or those who do not receive a life sentence.
Being isolated
from the community for a while with no academic certificates or proper professions, by the time the offenders are
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
released
from prison, they are no longer qualified to work and discriminated against by other
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people
in their community due to their shady past, despite
still
being at their working age.
Consequently
, these offenders will struggle to reintegrate back into society and are
easily
tempted to go back to commit illegal acts. According to statistics, over 75% of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
released
prisoners
are rearrested
within five years of being
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released
from the
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criminal
justice system. A
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better
solution,
in this case
, would be to train and educate
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criminals
,
rather
than locking them behind bars.
Furthermore
, establishing educational programs for
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criminals
without arresting them will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
prevent
the disruption of the economic system,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduce
the loss of the employment market and create more opportunities for these kinds of
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people
to right their wrongs and
finally
become a productive person in their communities.

In conclusion
, the question about the efficiency of imprisonment and pedagogy as a
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better
alternative is contentious with no easy answers. To my mind, the confinement of unlawful individuals gives
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
a lot of
benefits in reducing outlawed activities and ensuring the safety of each citizen. In the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
end
, imprisonment is
still
the most effective way to deal with
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criminals
and satisfy the victims’ desire for retribution under the authority of the state.
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But
the states should try to introduce new ways to fight
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crimes
such as education and training
Did you mean "achieving"? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'train' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
to achieve
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better
results,
instead
of relying too much on the incarceration, which
still
has flaws.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some students prefer to do group projects. Other students prefer to do individual projects. Which kind of projects do you think produce more learning and why? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
562 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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