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o you agree or disagree with the following statement? Because modern life is very complex, it is essential for young people to have the ability to plan and organize. v.2

o you agree or disagree with the following statement? Because modern life is very complex, it is essential for young people to have the ability to plan and organize. v. 2
The issue of whether the ability to plan and organize in this modern world is necessary for young people or not aroused much controversy among people of different ages and different perspectives. Definitely, some people, if were asked would agree with the statement that young people have to be able to make a plan, while, others have a negative attitude toward this point of view. As far as I am concerned, I postulate the ability of programing is really vital for everyone and young people are not exception. In the following paragraph, I will shed light on the arguments to support my view. The first point to be mentioned is that in this hectic life scheduling assists them to manage their time properly. Young people are busy with their education or jobs which take most of their time. If they have not a plan on how to spend their time, they would be spontaneous and waste a lot of time. For instance, I am a university student and work part-time in a research center. I have a daily schedule that determines what I am going to do during a day in details, I determine the most priority tasks in each day to accomplish my duties as the student and researcher in the best way. I never confront the lack of time even in a time-consuming project which makes my classmates and colleagues astonished. In approaching this issue, apart from the reason given above, another reason that deserves some words is the organization pushes youngsters to accomplish their task in high quality. When they arrange the plan to carry out their assignments they would be able to consider all point about the task and evaluate it from the variety of angels which helps them to enhance the quality of their works. On the other hand, when they are spontaneous, they perform their duties in rush, consequently, the result would not satisfied. For instance, I usually divide my tasks into different parts and force myself to complete them in a specific time. Thus, they can be done on time, moreover, the accuracy of work increase significantly. By the way of conclusion, based on the arguments that explored above, I am of the opinion that having a schedule and organize daily life should be an inevitable part of young people life. This strategy would help them to utilize their time in an efficient way. In addition, this way would be helpful when it comes to the quality of work.
The issue of whether the ability to
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plan
and organize in this modern world is necessary for
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young
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people
or not aroused much controversy among
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people
of
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different
ages and
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different
perspectives. Definitely,
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some
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people
, if
were asked
would
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agree
with the statement that
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young
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people
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have to
be able to
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make
a
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plan
, while, others have a
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negative
attitude toward this point of view. As far as I
am concerned
, I postulate the ability of
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programing
is
really
vital for everyone and
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young
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people
are not exception. In the following paragraph, I will shed light on the arguments to support my view.

The
first
point to
be mentioned
is that in this hectic life scheduling assists them to manage their
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time
properly
.
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Young
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people
are busy with their education or jobs which take most of their
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time
. If they have not a
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plan
on how to spend their
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time
, they would be spontaneous and waste
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a lot of
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time
.
For instance
, I am a university student and
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work
part-time in a research center. I have a daily schedule that determines what I am going to do during a day in
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details
, I determine the most priority
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tasks
in each day to accomplish my duties as the student and researcher in the best way. I never confront the lack of
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time
even in a time-consuming project which
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makes
my classmates and colleagues astonished.

In approaching this issue, apart from the reason
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given
above, another reason that deserves
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some
words is the organization pushes youngsters to accomplish their
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task
in high quality. When they arrange the
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plan
to carry out their assignments they would be able to consider all point about the
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task
and evaluate it from the variety of angels which
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helps
them to enhance the quality of their works.
On the other hand
, when they are spontaneous, they perform their duties in rush,
consequently
, the result would not
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satisfied
.
For instance
, I
usually
divide my
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tasks
into
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different
parts and force myself to complete them in a specific
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time
.
Thus
, they can
be done
on
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time
,
moreover
, the accuracy of
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work
increase
significantly
.

By the way of conclusion, based on the arguments that explored above, I am of the opinion that having a schedule and organize daily life should be an inevitable part of
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young
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people
life. This strategy would
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
them to utilize their
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time
Consider replacing "in an efficient way" with the adverb for "efficient"; e.g., "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
in an efficient way
.
In addition
, this way would be helpful when it
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comes
to the quality of
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work
.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
31Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay o you agree or disagree with the following statement? Because modern life is very complex, it is essential for young people to have the ability to plan and organize. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
416 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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