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Nuclear technology can be used for the advancement and betterment of the world and at the same time it can be a great threat for the people of the world. Do you support that the nuclear technology should be used for constructive purposes? v.2

Nuclear technology can be used for the advancement and betterment of the world and at the same time it can be a great threat for the people of the world. Do you support that the nuclear technology should be used for constructive purposes? v. 2
It is believed that the development of nuclear technology should not be used for any destructive purposes, and it should only be used for some constructive activities. I personally agree with the statement and the following essay will discuss in details about the nuclear technology. To begin with, it is true that nuclear technology should only be used for some positive activities since it could be a serious threat for human kinds. The technology of nuclear can be utilised as a deadly weapon since it could be used to kill tens of thousands of people in just a few minutes. Besides that, the leakage of the nuclear plants could also give negative effect to human's health, as the radiation could increase the risk of down syndrome and cancer. One of the famous examples is the Chernobyl tragedy which had killed millions of Soviet people. Therefore, the United Nations should strictly monitor and control on countries that used nuclear technology. In spite of its negative effects, the nuclear technology could be beneficial for mankind. As the world still depending on fossil fuel as the main source of electricity these days, the nuclear technology could be used as a power plant. Many scientists have proven that nuclear electricity plant is more efficient and friendlier to the environment, as it produces less carbon. Besides that, some medical practitioners have used nuclear technology as one of the alternative methods for curing some diseases. Therefore, the technology of nuclear could be useful for the human being as long as it is used safely and proportionately. In conclusion, it is a fact that nuclear technology could be used for constructive or destructive purposes. I support that the technology should only be used for positive activities such as the power plant or as a medical treatment, and never be used for any negative purpose since it could be a serious threat for human's civilisation.
It
is believed
that the development of nuclear
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technology
should not be
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used
for any destructive purposes, and it should
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only
be
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used
for
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some
constructive activities. I
personally
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agree
with the statement and the following essay will discuss in
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details
about the nuclear technology.

To
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begin
with, it is true that nuclear
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technology
should
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only
be
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used
for
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some
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positive
activities since it could be a serious threat for human kinds. The
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technology
of nuclear can be
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utilised
as a deadly weapon since it could be
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used
to kill tens of thousands of
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people
in
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just
a few minutes.
Besides
that, the leakage of the nuclear
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plants
could
also
give
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negative
effect to human's health, as the radiation could increase the
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risk
of down syndrome and cancer. One of the
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famous
examples is the Chernobyl tragedy which had killed millions of Soviet
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people
.
Therefore
, the United Nations should
strictly
monitor and control on countries that
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used
nuclear technology.

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In spite of
its
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negative
effects, the nuclear
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technology
could be beneficial for mankind. As the world
still
depending on fossil fuel as the main source of electricity these days, the nuclear
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technology
could be
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used
as a power
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plant
.
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Many
scientists have proven that nuclear electricity
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plant
is more efficient and friendlier to the environment, as it produces less carbon.
Besides
that,
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some
medical practitioners have
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used
nuclear
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technology
as one of the alternative methods for curing
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some
diseases.
Therefore
, the
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technology
of nuclear could be useful for the human being as long as it is
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used
safely
and
proportionately
.

In conclusion
, it is a fact that nuclear
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technology
could be
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used
for constructive or destructive purposes. I support that the
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technology
should
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only
be
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used
for
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positive
activities such as the power
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plant
or as a medical treatment, and never be
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used
for any
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negative
purpose since it could be a serious threat for human's
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civilisation
.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
13Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Nuclear technology can be used for the advancement and betterment of the world and at the same time it can be a great threat for the people of the world. Do you support that the nuclear technology should be used for constructive purposes? v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
317 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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