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World peace is maintained through the threat of nuclear weapons. Nuclear power also provides cheap and clean energy. Therefore many people say that the benefits of nuclear energy outweigh the disadavantages. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of nuclear technology and give your opinion. v.2

World peace is maintained through the threat of nuclear weapons. Nuclear power also provides cheap and clean energy. Therefore many people say that the benefits of nuclear energy outweigh the disadavantages. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of nuclear technology and give your opinion. v. 2
There is no doubt that nuclear energy can be harmful to humans, but it can also be useful in many researches. Although some people believe that nuclear power can be dangerous to human beings, I would argue that it can be useful in many scientific fields. On the one hand, those who believe nuclear energy is deleterious might argue that it can destroy the whole world. This is because it releases various radioactive materials in the environment which can cause harm to human beings. For example, take Hiroshima and Nagasaki which has been severely affected by nuclear bombs in world war, due to which we can see that there is no life that has been observed in those places for a long time. In contrast, if there is no nuclear power that is used for weapons, it leads to a happy and peaceful life. On the other hand, I believe that it can be helpful because it can be used in medical fields. The reason for this is that nuclear technologies provide images inside the human body and can help to treat a disease. For instance, nuclear research has allowed doctors to predict precisely the amount of radiation required to kill cancer tumours without damaging healthy cells. If this nuclear energy not used, then we can profoundly see large amount of human life’s at stake. In conclusion, despite the danger of using the nuclear power for weapons, it is my firm belief that this can play a crucial role in various fields such as medical, agriculture and many others.
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humans
,
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it can
also
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many
researches. Although
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some
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people
believe that nuclear power can be
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dangerous
to
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human
beings, I would argue that it can be useful in
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many
scientific fields.

On the one hand, those who believe nuclear energy is deleterious might argue that it can
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destroy
the whole world. This is
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because
it releases various radioactive materials in the environment which can cause harm to
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human
beings.
For example
, take Hiroshima and Nagasaki which has been
severely
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affected
by nuclear bombs in world war, due to which we can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
see
that there is no life that has
been observed
in those places for a long time.
In contrast
, if there is no nuclear power
that is
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used
for weapons, it leads to a happy and peaceful life.

On the other hand
, I believe that it can be helpful
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because
it can be
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used
in medical fields.
The reason for this is
that nuclear technologies provide images inside the
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human
body and can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
to treat a disease.
For instance
, nuclear research has
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allowed
doctors to predict
precisely
the amount of radiation required to kill cancer
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tumours
without damaging healthy cells. If this nuclear energy not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
, then we can
profoundly
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
see
large amount of
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human
life’s at stake.

In conclusion
, despite the
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danger
of using the nuclear power for weapons, it is my firm belief that this can play a crucial role in various fields such as medical, agriculture and
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many
others.
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8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes

IELTS essay World peace is maintained through the threat of nuclear weapons. Nuclear power also provides cheap and clean energy. Therefore many people say that the benefits of nuclear energy outweigh the disadavantages. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of nuclear technology and give your opinion. v. 2

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