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Nowdays more people are choosing to socialize online rather than face to face. Is this a positive or negative development? v.4

Nowdays more people are choosing to socialize online rather than face to face. Is this a positive or negative development? v. 4
In present generation, most of the people are interacting socially with others through online on social networks and not meeting directly. In my opinion, I believe that there is some negative sign to socialize in online. Few people are taking advantage at online meetups. In olden days, people gets interacted directly to others. At that time, there is no any tele-communication or social networking sites. You can explore places and spend some time together. So that relationship go stronger. For example, I have good childhood friends. Because, we spent time together and play cricket and watching movies when we were free time. Now most of all the teenagers are preferring facebook, wats app and some other dating sites to interact. I have to accept that in some cases socialize in online has some advantages. If you go some new place you could not able to find friends easily. In that cases, online is the best option to find the new people. You can interact easily with facebook or instagram wherever you go. For example, When I came to Toronto first time, facebook helped me a lot to found the new friends. But there is some dis advantages choosing socialize with online. Due to privacy concern, few people trapping us using social networking sites which causes teenagers went wrong direction. In conclusion, I believe that socialize through online is easily to find new friends. But if relationship continue to grow stronger, you have to interact directly.
In present generation, most of the
people
are interacting
socially
with others through
online
on social networks and not meeting
directly
. In my opinion, I believe that there is
some
negative
sign
to
socialize
in
online
. Few
people
are taking advantage at
online
meetups.

In olden days,
people
gets
interacted
directly
to others. At that
time
, there is
no
any
tele-communication
or social networking sites. You can explore places and spend
some
time
together.
So that
relationship go stronger.
For example
, I have
good
childhood
friends
.
Because
, we spent
time
together and play cricket and watching movies when we were free time.

Now
most of all the
teenagers
are preferring
facebook
,
wats
app and
some
other dating sites to interact. I
have to
accept that in
some
cases
socialize
in
online
has
some
advantages.
If
you go
some
new
place you could not able to find
friends
easily
. In that cases,
online
is the best option to find the
new
people
. You can interact
easily
with
facebook
or
instagram
wherever you go.
For example
, When I came to Toronto
first
time
,
facebook
helped
me a lot to found the
new
friends
.
But
there is
some
dis
advantages choosing
socialize
with
online
. Due to privacy concern, few
people
trapping us using social networking sites which causes
teenagers
went
wrong
direction.

In conclusion
, I believe that
socialize
through
online
is
easily
to find
new
friends
.
But
if relationship continue to grow stronger, you
have to
interact
directly
.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
28Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
13Mistakes

IELTS essay Nowdays more people are choosing to socialize online rather than face to face. Is this a positive or negative development? v. 4

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245 words
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