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Nowadays, more and more people are choosing to socialize online rather than face to face. Is this a positive or negative development? v.1

Nowadays, more and more people are choosing to socialize online rather than face to face. Is this a positive or negative development? v. 1
Nowadays, crimes are increasing in number across the cities all over the world. The highest percentage of these are committed by the young people. This essay intends to discuss the reasons for this and suggest certain solutions to subside the same. There is a plethora of causes of crimes in the world. One of the major reasons is widespread poverty. To substantiate, such offences like robbery are done for the need of money. In the USA, we have read a plenty of cases where people have been robbed at gunpoint. This reflects that the youth does not have a job, hence they resort to such activities. In order to get easy money many youngsters indulge in smuggling. There have been cases of rapes being reported in several countries. For example, a recent case in India, where a girl refused advances from an unknown boy. Sadly, the girl was subjected to an acid attack and survived with 80% burns. The reasons could be mental instability in such a case. Finally, certain measures need to be taken up to reduce such heinous crimes. Furthermore, the biggest solution would be to create more jobs. Another would be to sensitize the youth about the right and the wrong. This sensitization should start from their respective homes. Moving on to the heinous crimes that happen in the countries, I feel the perpetrators should be subjected to capital punishment. To conclude, this universe would be a better place to live only if the crimes are reduced. It is upon us to create a safe universe for all of us to live happily and peacefully together.
Nowadays,
crimes
are increasing in number across the cities all over the world. The highest percentage of these
are committed
by the young
people
. This essay intends to discuss the reasons for this and suggest certain solutions to subside the same.

There is a plethora of causes of
crimes
in the world. One of the major reasons is widespread poverty. To substantiate, such
offences
like robbery
are done
for the need of money.

In the USA, we have read a
plenty
of cases where
people
have
been robbed
at gunpoint. This reflects that the youth does not have a job,
hence
they resort to such activities. In order to
get
easy money
many
youngsters indulge in smuggling. There have been cases of rapes
being reported
in several countries.
For example
, a recent case in India, where a girl refused advances from an unknown boy.
Sadly
, the girl
was subjected
to an acid attack and survived with 80% burns. The reasons could be mental instability in such a case.
Finally
, certain measures need to
be taken
up to
reduce
such heinous crimes.

Furthermore
, the biggest solution would be to create more jobs. Another would be to sensitize the youth about the right and the
wrong
. This sensitization should
start
from their respective homes. Moving on to the heinous
crimes
that happen in the countries, I feel the perpetrators should
be subjected
to capital punishment.

To conclude
, this universe would be a better place to
live
only
if the
crimes
are
reduced
. It is upon us to create a safe universe for all of us to
live
happily
and
peacefully
together.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay Nowadays, more and more people are choosing to socialize online rather than face to face. Is this a positive or negative development? v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
269 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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