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Nowadays young people want more freedom and they pay little or no attention towards the older people's advice. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? v.1

Nowadays young people want more freedom and they pay little or no attention towards the older people's advice. with this statement? v. 1
Today it is a popular belief that students attending high school should volunteer in the community as part of their schooling. I strongly agree with this notion. Volunteer work can provide young people with the experiences they need for paying jobs and it can also help them see themselves as valuable contributors to society. When completing compulsory work activities with charitable organizations or community organizations, students gain skills that they can add to their resumes and use in future jobs. Working out in the real world quickly teaches young people the importance of time management, clear communication and teamwork. Employers like McDonald’s restaurants, who provide many young people with their first paying jobs, look for volunteer work on resumes as evidence of having developed some relevant work skills. So, although students are not paid for their time, they are building valuable abilities for future employment. Perhaps even more importantly, when students volunteer, they are more likely to realize that their actions have a positive impact on the world around them. Often the problems of our world can seem overwhelming, but if students are given the opportunity to help others, even in a small way, they will see that they can make a difference. In schools that have been running these programs, there has been an incredible boost in student morale and the community has benefitted from the talent and time that young people have contributed to the many programs that need support. It’s true that studying for academics is time-consuming and students already have a lot to do in a day, but if we teach them how to step up and help others, we create a better future for us all. In conclusion, it is a great idea to have unpaid community service as part of a high school program because it will help the next generation to prepare for employment and it will build a caring community that is willing and able to make our world a better place. It’s my hope to see this in every school.
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students
attending high
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should
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volunteer
in the
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community
as part of their schooling. I
strongly
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agree
with this notion.
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Volunteer
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work
can provide
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young
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people
with the experiences they need for paying jobs and it can
also
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help
them
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see
themselves as valuable contributors to society.

When completing compulsory
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work
activities with charitable organizations or
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community
organizations,
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students
gain
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skills
that they can
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add
to their resumes and
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use
in future jobs. Working out in the real
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world
quickly
teaches
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young
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people
the importance of time management,
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clear
communication and teamwork. Employers like McDonald’s restaurants, who provide
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many
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young
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people
with their
first
paying jobs, look for
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volunteer
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work
on resumes as evidence of having developed
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some
relevant
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work
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skills
.
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So
, although
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students
are not paid for their time, they are building valuable abilities for future employment.

Perhaps even more
importantly
, when
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students
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volunteer
, they are more likely to realize that their actions have a
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positive
impact on the
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world
around them.
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Often
the problems of our
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world
can seem overwhelming,
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but
if
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students
are
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given
the opportunity to
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help
others, even in a
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small
way, they will
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see
that they can
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make
a difference. In
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schools
that have been running these programs, there has been an incredible boost in
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student
morale and the
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community
has
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benefitted
from the talent and time that
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young
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people
have contributed to the
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many
programs that need support. It’s true that studying for academics is time-consuming and
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students
already have a lot to do in a day,
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but
if we teach them how to step up and
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help
others, we create a better future for us all.

In conclusion
, it is a great
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idea
to have unpaid
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community
service as part of a high
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school
program
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because
it will
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help
the
next
generation to prepare for employment and it will build a caring
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community
that is
willing and able to
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make
our
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world
a better place. It’s my hope to
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see
this in every
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school
.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Nowadays young people want more freedom and they pay little or no attention towards the older people's advice. with this statement? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
339 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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