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Nowadays, young people admire sports stars though they often do not set a good example. Do you think this is a positive or negative development? v.5

Nowadays, young people admire sports stars though they often do not set a good example. Do you think this is a positive or negative development? v. 5
The role of personality and images are play vital role in our life. it is irrefutable that, some sports personality admire us just because of strong character, sense of humor, way of thinking, strong decision making and looks and most important their sport style. However, on the other hand, few things are not acceptable or tolerance in the form of smoking, drugs habits etc. I put my positive and negative views regarding my paragraph, At begin with, sports are the versatile game, it is one of the most famous game among the people and many people has desire they can become a national hero in all over the world and people love them. However, it is quite difficult situation because every one cannot fulfill his demand that' s why they make the images and admire people who are related to sports field. Moreover, I strongly put my positive views in to two segments. Firstly, I have seen many example in my society, most of the proverbial personality are introvert. they play active role in social service, they love to do help others with in a country or outside the country, they help those people who are needy and they required food and shutter. I think it is a basic reason that' s why people love to follow them. Here i would like to talk about Imran Khan, he is one of the most well known Pakistani cricketer in all over the world, when he joined cricket he won the world cup, after that he established shaukat khannum hospital for those people who are fighting with cancer diseases. Secondly, youth are admire sports stars just because of their look, fitness, personality and none other than their popularity. On the other hand, why we should not admire to sports people or well known personality? It is commonly believe that, in our society there are plethora amount of immense issue in the form of drugs, wine, smoking and so on. When sports people are famous they are involved in to bad habits and start to do many negative things and according to this kind of behavior young generation can easily follow it. That' s why it is not good for health and it creates negativity. I put in it nutshell, I pen down saying that, I believe that, the positive ratio of young people admiration is outweighed rather than negative development.
The role of
personality
and images are play vital role in our life.
it
is irrefutable that,
some
sports
personality
admire
us
just
because
of strong character, sense of humor, way of thinking, strong
decision making
and looks and most
important
their
sport
style.
However
, on the
other
hand, few things are not acceptable or tolerance in the form of smoking, drugs habits etc.

I put my
positive
and
negative
views regarding my paragraph,

At
begin
with,
sports
are the versatile game, it is one of the most
famous
game among the
people
and
many
people
has
desire they can become a national hero in all over the world and
people
love
them.
However
, it is quite difficult situation
because
every one cannot fulfill his demand
that&
#039; s why they
make
the images and
admire
people
who
are related
to
sports
field.
Moreover
, I
strongly
put my
positive
views in to two segments.

Firstly
, I have
seen
many example
in my society, most of the proverbial
personality
are introvert.
they
play active role in social service, they
love
to do
help
others with in a country or outside the country, they
help
those
people
who are
needy and
they required food and shutter. I
think
it is a basic reason
that&
#039; s why
people
love
to follow them. Here
i
would like to talk about
Imran
Khan, he is one of the most well known Pakistani cricketer in all over the world, when he
joined
cricket he won the world cup, after that he established
shaukat
khannum
hospital for those
people
who are fighting with cancer diseases.

Secondly
, youth are
admire
sports
stars
just
because
of their look, fitness,
personality
and none
other
than their popularity.

On the
other
hand, why we should not
admire
to
sports
people
or well known
personality
? It is
commonly
believe
that, in our society there are plethora
amount
of immense issue in the form of drugs, wine, smoking and
so
on. When
sports
people
are
famous
they
are involved
in to
bad
habits and
start
to do
many
negative
things and according to this kind of behavior young generation can
easily
follow it.
That&
#039; s why it is not
good
for health and it creates negativity.

I put in it nutshell, I pen down saying that, I believe that, the
positive
ratio of young
people
admiration
is outweighed
rather
than
negative
development.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
29Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
17Mistakes

IELTS essay Nowadays, young people admire sports stars though they often do not set a good example. Do you think this is a positive or negative development? v. 5

Essay
  American English
7 paragraphs
398 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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