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A government's role is only to provide defense capability and urban infrastructure, such as roads, water and power. All other services, such as education, health and social security, should be provided by private groups or individuals in the communit v.3

A government's role is only to provide defense capability and urban infrastructure, such as roads, water and power. All other services, such as education, health and social security, should be provided by private groups or individuals in the communit v. 3
The role of government has become a debatable issue. Some natives believe that government should only provide services related to defense, infrastructure and electricity. However, other services should be given by other private companies. I think authorities should be responsible for all services for their citizens. This essay will discuss reasons behind giving services by government and problems people will face if it is aided by private firm. To begin with, people paid some amount of their earning in terms of tax to the government Hence, government have a plenty of money so it is responsibility of the government to allocate the money according to the need of each sector because they have the data which they collected through survey. For example if country is lacking behind in education they allocate the fund to improve the education sector by building school and colleges for the people. Moreover, it is also the right of people to get the facilities from the government. If people have to pay money for the facilities then it will not only disturb their budget but also loosing faith in government and become hesitant towards paying tax. However, I also feel people will face problems if these amenities are aided by private corporations as they will charge some amount of money from the public which will bring inflation in the country. Therefore, it is payed by only those people who can afford it. In worst situation, it bridges the gap between rich and poor people. Furthermore, there might be a more chance of fruad and corruption in private firms in providing the facilities to public. In conclusion, government should do proper management while allocating money for providing services to the people so that everyone get the benefit of it.
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has become a debatable issue.
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natives believe that
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government
should
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only
provide
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services
related to defense, infrastructure and electricity.
However
, other
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services
should be
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given
by other
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private
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companies
. I
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think
authorities should be responsible for all
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services
for their citizens. This essay will discuss reasons behind giving
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services
by
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government
and problems
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people
will face if it
is aided
by
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private
firm.

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with,
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paid
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some
amount of their earning in terms of tax to the
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government
Hence
,
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government
have a
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plenty
of
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money
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so
it is responsibility of the
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government
to allocate the
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money
according to the need of each sector
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because
they have the data which they collected through survey.
For example
if country is lacking behind in education they allocate the fund to
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improve
the education sector by building school and colleges for the
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people
.
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, it is
also
the right of
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people
to
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get
the facilities from the
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government
. If
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people
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have to
pay
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money
for the facilities then it will not
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only
disturb their budget
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but
also
loosing faith in
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government
and become hesitant towards paying tax.

However
, I
also
feel
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people
will face problems if these amenities
are aided
by
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private
corporations as they will charge
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some
amount of
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money
from the public which will bring inflation in the country.
Therefore
, it is
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payed
by
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only
those
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people
who can afford it. In
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worst
situation, it bridges the gap between rich and poor
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people
.
Furthermore
, there might be a more chance of
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fruad
and corruption in
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private
firms in providing the facilities to public.

In conclusion
,
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government
should do proper management while allocating
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money
for providing
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services
to the
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people
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so
that everyone
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get
the benefit of it.
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32Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay A government's role is only to provide defense capability and urban infrastructure, such as roads, water and power. All other services, such as education, health and social security, should be provided by private groups or individuals in the communit v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
292 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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