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Nowadays traffic jams are becoming a big problem in most cities and bigger towns Some people suggest that widening of roads is a solution to this problem Do you agree or disagree Give your opinion and suggest a solution to the problem v.2

Nowadays traffic jams are becoming a big problem in most cities and bigger towns Some people suggest that widening of roads is a solution to this problem Give your opinion and suggest a solution to the problem v. 2
In this rampant age of urbanization, with the progression in population, traffic jams have become one of the major headache mostly in developing and developed cities. A lot of people think that widening of roads will eradicate this problem. I strongly disagree to this fact and shall analyze the same in my essay. At the outset, there are primarily three reasons that are contributing towards traffic jams in cities. Firstly, people these days are always in a rush and do not have time and patience to wait at the traffic signals. In addition, they jump traffic signals and take wrong lanes that blocks the way for the people, coming from other direction and hence, blocking the traffic. Secondly, despite designated parking lots, a lot of individuals are parking their vehicles anywhere on the road as per their convenience without thinking of the congestion it may cause. To illustrate, one can imagine the plight of commuters and the pace of vehicular movement on a road where two of its three lanes are encroached and all types of vehicles negotiate with each other on the remaining one lane to move ahead especially in local markets. Lastly, the traffic policemen are never stationed at the designated signals where traffic is usually slow and they are busy in allocating receipt to violators and getting bribed. Their absence from signals during peek hours add to traffic bottleneck, as people tries to cross the road in any way it is feasible without thinking of the welfare of others. However, there are few people who thinks that widening of roads will help to resolve this everlasting problem. To add to this, in a recent survey held in the national capital itself, the total percentage of roads that are six lanes or above is 67%, which means less congested and more convenient roads but due to improper traffic sense and planning, there is no weight-age of the above percentage. From my notion, I believe that the roads are widened enough for the commuter to commute, still the traffic jams are being caused. So, it should be individual' s responsibility to abide by the traffic rules and do not contribute to traffic congestion caused by violating the rules. Moreover, the traffic law should be made more strict and people should be charged a heavy fine for violating any traffic signal. Also, their driving license could be impound unless the fine is paid. To conclude, undeniably the traffic jams are increasing mostly in city areas which is becoming an alarming concern, however, by following traffic rules and imposing heavy fines to violators, this monstrous problem can be controlled to an extent.
In this rampant age of urbanization, with the progression in population,
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traffic
jams have become one of the major headache
mostly
in developing and developed cities.
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A lot of
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people
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think
that widening of
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roads
will eradicate this problem. I
strongly
disagree to this fact and shall analyze the same in my essay.

At the outset, there are
primarily
three reasons that are contributing towards
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traffic
jams in cities.
Firstly
,
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people
these days are always in a rush and do not have time and patience to wait at the
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traffic
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signals
.
In addition
, they jump
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traffic
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signals
and take
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wrong
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lanes
that blocks the way for the
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people
, coming from other direction and
hence
, blocking the
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traffic
.
Secondly
, despite designated parking lots,
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a lot of
individuals are parking their vehicles anywhere on the
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road
as per their convenience without thinking of the congestion it may cause. To illustrate, one can imagine the plight of commuters and the pace of vehicular movement on a
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road
where two of its three
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lanes
are encroached
and all types of vehicles negotiate with each other on the remaining one
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lane
to
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move
ahead
especially
in local markets.
Lastly
, the
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traffic
policemen are never stationed at the designated
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signals
where
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traffic
is
usually
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slow and
they are busy in allocating receipt to violators and getting bribed. Their absence from
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signals
during peek hours
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add
to
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traffic
bottleneck, as
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people
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tries
to cross the
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road
in any way it is feasible without thinking of the welfare of others.

However
, there are few
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people
who
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thinks
that widening of
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roads
will
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help
to resolve this everlasting problem. To
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add
to this, in a recent survey held in the national capital itself, the total percentage of
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roads
that are six
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lanes
or above is 67%, which means less congested and more convenient
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roads
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but
due to improper
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traffic
sense and planning, there is no weight-age of the above percentage.

From my notion, I believe that the
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roads
are widened
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enough
for the commuter to commute,
still
the
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traffic
jams are
being caused
.
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So
, it should be
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individual&
#039; s responsibility to abide by the
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traffic
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rules
and do not contribute to
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traffic
congestion caused by violating the
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rules
.
Moreover
, the
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traffic
law should
be made
more strict and
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people
should
be charged
a heavy fine for violating any
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traffic
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signal
.
Also
, their driving license could be
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impound
unless the fine
is paid
.

To conclude
,
undeniably
the
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traffic
jams are increasing
mostly
in city areas which is becoming an alarming concern,
however
, by following
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traffic
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
rules
and imposing heavy fines to violators, this monstrous problem can
be controlled
to an extent.
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39Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Nowadays traffic jams are becoming a big problem in most cities and bigger towns Some people suggest that widening of roads is a solution to this problem Give your opinion and suggest a solution to the problem v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
441 words
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