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Nowadays congestion and traffic jams are a common and major problem in most cities. Some people believe it is a good idea to construct wider roads to resolve this issue. Do you agree or disagree with this statement? What can be the solution, in your opini v.2

Nowadays congestion and traffic jams are a common and major problem in most cities. Some people believe it is a good idea to construct wider roads to resolve this issue. What can be the solution, in your opini v. 2
Lifestyle in the cities has undergone dramatic changes over recent decades. Presently, the problem of traffic jams is spreading its roots in every nook and corner of the cities. Therefore, some people advocate that the establishment of extensive roads is a lucrative panacea to address this worrying issue. Here, i would like to discord with the given statement. There are manifold points to endorse my view. First and foremost, nowadays, most of people travel by their personal cars and it leads to rise in the number of traffic jams. Therefore, It is a prime duty of government to discourage people towards the excessive usage of cars in order to restrain this burning issue. What is more, providing better facilities of public transport could be fruitful to take over traffic concerns. To demonstrate, the services of buses and trains should be frequent so that people can travel on time easily without any inconvenience. Adding to it, all it is imperative to make transport modes less crowded, neat and clean by taking proactive steps. Consequently, people will be encouraged towards using public vehicles and it will help to curb traffic congestion. Furthermore, making flyovers is likely to reduce the problem of gridlocks at larger extent. To be specific, the presence of flyovers can restrict the number of cars in the city centre. Besides this, flyovers can prevent the entry of cars on busy roads. Hence, it is required to make flyovers to control traffic. Last but not least, a large number of trees will be cut down due to construction of wider roads. As a result, it will be detrimental for ecology. On the contrary, others have contrasting arguments. They think that wider roads could assist to reduce the number of gridlocks. To justify, roads will not get flooded with a large number of vehicles if there is ample space to travel easily. What is more, the chances of accidents will decline on the roads. Hence, the number of jams caused by accidents will be no more in existence. To recapitulate, undeniably, extensive roads are worthwhile to combat the concern of traffic. However, this is not the only solution, governments must take some other remedial measures to nip this issue in the bud.
Lifestyle in the cities has undergone dramatic
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changes
over recent decades.
Presently
, the problem of
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traffic
jams is spreading its roots in every nook and corner of the cities.
Therefore
,
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some
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people
advocate that the establishment of extensive
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roads
is a lucrative panacea to address this worrying issue. Here,
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i
would like to discord with the
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given
statement.

There are manifold points to endorse my view.
First
and foremost, nowadays, most of
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people
travel by their personal
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cars
and it leads to rise in the
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number
of
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traffic
jams.
Therefore
, It is a prime duty of
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government
to discourage
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people
towards the excessive usage of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cars
in order to restrain this burning issue.
What is more
, providing better facilities of public transport could be fruitful to take over
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traffic
concerns. To demonstrate, the services of buses and trains should be frequent
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so
that
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people
can travel on time
easily
without any inconvenience. Adding to it, all it is imperative to
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make
transport modes less crowded, neat and clean by taking proactive steps.
Consequently
,
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people
will
be encouraged
towards using public vehicles and it will
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help
to curb
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traffic
congestion.

Furthermore
, making flyovers is likely to
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reduce
the problem of gridlocks at larger extent. To be specific, the presence of flyovers can restrict the
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number
of
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cars
in the city
Possible spelling mistake. 'centre' is British English.
centre
.
Besides
this, flyovers can
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prevent
the entry of
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cars
on busy
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roads
.
Hence
, it
is required
to
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make
flyovers to control
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traffic
. Last
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but
not least, a large
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number
of trees will be
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cut
down due to construction of wider
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roads
.
As a result
, it will be detrimental for ecology.
On the contrary
, others have contrasting arguments.

They
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think
that wider
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roads
could assist to
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reduce
the
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number
of gridlocks. To justify,
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roads
will not
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get
flooded with a large
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number
of vehicles if there is ample space to travel
easily
.
What is more
, the chances of accidents will decline on the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
roads
.
Hence
, the
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number
of jams caused by accidents will be no more in existence.

To recapitulate,
undeniably
, extensive
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roads
are worthwhile to combat the concern of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
traffic
.
However
, this is not the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
solution,
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governments
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must
take
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some
other remedial measures to nip this issue in the bud.
15Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
28Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes
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IELTS essay Nowadays congestion and traffic jams are a common and major problem in most cities. Some people believe it is a good idea to construct wider roads to resolve this issue. What can be the solution, in your opini v. 2

Essay
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5.5
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