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Nowadays traffic jams are becoming a big problem in most cities and bigger towns. Some people suggest that widening of roads is a solution to this problem. Do you agree or disagree? v.1

Nowadays traffic jams are becoming a big problem in most cities and bigger towns. Some people suggest that widening of roads is a solution to this problem. v. 1
Inhabitants of planet earth are faced with numerous challenges in the form of overpopulation, traffic congestions, and pollution and so on. Metropolitan and other growing cities not only offers basic necessities and luxurious lifestyle but they do come up with their own challenges and one such is traffic congestion. Though widening of roads to overcome this issue is laudable but I don't agree fully and believe there are other alternates available. This essay will analyse the problem associated with extending the width of the roads and will suggest few alternatives. Proponents of this view point say that widening streets and expressways will help them to increase the number of lanes which in turn can cater more traffic. This strategy will surely help to reduce congestion, but usually, streets and highways are running at their maximum width and widening them either by narrowing the islands or reducing the pedestrian tracks would not be possible. In many cases, this strategy doesn't always work as the building and shops are already located at the edge of the road. For instance, Zaib-Un-Nisa street in sadder, Karachi is already at its maximum width and the only solution to this problem is to allow the traffic to flow in one direction on the entire street. However, there are many alternate approaches which can be implemented to tackle this problem. We can easily reduce traffic blackening on streets by charging the motorists more during rush hours, car parking should not be allowed on busy roads and overhead pedestrian bridges should be constructed to regulate the traffic flow. We can also use the lane-divider technique like the one used in Malaysia, where one lane of the opposite track is included in the congested track to regulate the flow in busy hours. Moreover, office workers should be encouraged to use car pooling services like Singapore. Furthermore, people should be motivated to use mass transit system like the subways and the metros. To recapitulate, the aforementioned provides plausible alternate solutions to reduce traffic jams and have highlighted some factors that can limit the extension of road widths. In my opinion, widening of roads will not work always and we should look into using alternate approaches like the ones mentioned above.
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are faced
with numerous challenges in the form of overpopulation,
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traffic
congestions, and pollution and
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so
on. Metropolitan and other growing cities not
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only
offers
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basic necessities
and luxurious lifestyle
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but
they do
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come
up with their
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own
challenges and one such is
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traffic
congestion. Though
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widening
of
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roads
to overcome this issue is laudable
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but
I don't
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agree
fully
and believe there are other
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alternates
available. This essay will
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analyse
the problem associated with extending the
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width
of the
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roads
and will suggest few alternatives.

Proponents of this view point say that
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widening
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streets
and expressways will
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help
them to increase the number of lanes which in turn can cater more
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traffic
. This strategy will
surely
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help
to
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reduce
congestion,
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but
usually
,
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streets
and highways are running at their maximum
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width
and
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widening
them either by narrowing the islands or reducing the pedestrian
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tracks
would not be possible. In
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many
cases, this strategy doesn't always work as the building and shops are already located at the edge of the
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road
.
For instance
,
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Zaib-Un-Nisa
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street
in sadder, Karachi is already at its maximum
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width
and the
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only
solution to this problem is to
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allow
the
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traffic
to flow in one direction on the entire street.

However
, there are
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many
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alternate
approaches which can
be implemented
to tackle this problem. We can
easily
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reduce
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traffic
blackening on
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streets
by charging the motorists more during rush hours, car parking should not be
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allowed
on busy
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roads
and overhead pedestrian bridges should
be constructed
to regulate the
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traffic
flow. We can
also
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use
the lane-divider technique like the one
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used
in Malaysia, where one lane of the opposite
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track
is included
in the congested
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track
to regulate the flow in busy hours.
Moreover
, office workers should
be encouraged
to
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use
car pooling services like Singapore.
Furthermore
,
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people
should
be motivated
to
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use
mass transit system like the subways and the metros.

To recapitulate, the aforementioned provides plausible
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alternate
solutions to
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reduce
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traffic
jams and have highlighted
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some
factors that can limit the extension of
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road
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widths
. In my opinion,
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widening
of
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roads
will not
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work always
and we should look into using
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alternate
approaches like the ones mentioned above.
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29Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS essay Nowadays traffic jams are becoming a big problem in most cities and bigger towns. Some people suggest that widening of roads is a solution to this problem. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
370 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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