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Most of the countries provide free health service. Some people believe that people with unhealthy habits like smoking, stress and not exercising should not get this free service. v.1

Most of the countries provide free health service. Some people believe that people with unhealthy habits like smoking, stress and not exercising should not get this free service. v. 1
In my opinion, medical care is a primary right of every citizen of a country. Irrespective of lifestyles and social habits everyone should get health care service at free of cost. Living standards of the people depend on many factors like society, family conditions, job responsibilities etc. People working in IT and BPO industries are normally highly stressed in designing intricate business solutions. Most of the times they don’t find time to work out for body fitness, this is due to irregular and long working hours. Employees of a manufacturing industry also undergo similar problems due to odd work shifts. Despite ruining their healthy lifestyle, they contribute to the society in the form of tax. Why should not they get free health service? Some of my friends argue that the restriction of health care services based on social habits like smoking, consumption of alcohol etc. , may improve the health levels of a society. They assume that people may afraid of not getting free medical service due to these habits and they may quit. One of the surveys conducted in India has proved it wrong. This survey is conducted on a group of young people aged between 19 and 30. Results of the survey revealed a shocking truth. People who are addicted to these habits do not really care about their health. Surprisingly, most of the people suggested decreasing the price of cigarettes and spirits. So the analysis of the survey clearly illustrated that the alterations to the medical system based on adverse habits do not really help the society.   Instead of restricting the free health service, increasing the cost of cigars and alcohol by imposing a high tax is highly recommended. In summary, I strongly feel that free health service system should not be based on people’s unhealthy lifestyle. We should treat this as a psychological disorder and local council should take responsibility to provide proper counselling at no charge, to improve living standards.
In my opinion, medical
care
is a primary right of every citizen of a country. Irrespective of lifestyles and social
habits
everyone should
get
health
care
service
at
free
of cost.

Living standards of the
people
depend on
many
factors like
society
, family conditions, job responsibilities etc.
People
working in IT and BPO industries are
normally
highly
stressed
in designing intricate business solutions.
Most of the times
they don’t find time to work out for body fitness, this is due to irregular and long working hours. Employees of a manufacturing industry
also
undergo similar problems due to odd work shifts. Despite ruining their healthy lifestyle, they contribute to the
society
in the form of tax. Why should not they
get
free
health
service?

Some
of my friends argue that the restriction of
health
care
services
based on social
habits
like smoking, consumption of alcohol etc.
,
may
improve
the
health
levels of a
society
. They assume that
people
may afraid of not getting
free
medical
service
due to these
habits and
they may quit. One of the
surveys
conducted in India has proved it
wrong
. This
survey
is conducted
on a group of young
people
aged between 19 and 30. Results of the
survey
revealed a shocking truth.
People
who
are addicted
to these
habits
do not
really
care
about their
health
.
Surprisingly
, most of the
people
suggested decreasing the price of cigarettes and spirits.
So
the analysis of the
survey
clearly
illustrated that the alterations to the medical system based on adverse
habits
do not
really
help
the
society
.
 
Instead
of restricting the
free
health
service
, increasing the cost of cigars and alcohol by imposing a high tax is
highly
recommended.

In summary, I
strongly
feel that
free
health
service
system should not
be based
on
people’s
unhealthy lifestyle. We should treat this as a psychological disorder and local council should take responsibility to provide proper counselling at no charge, to
improve
living standards.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
41Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay Most of the countries provide free health service. Some people believe that people with unhealthy habits like smoking, stress and not exercising should not get this free service. v. 1

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