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Nowadays, there is a trend that reports of media focus on problems and emergencies rather than positive development. Some people think it is harmful to individuals and to society. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.7

Nowadays, there is a trend that reports of media focus on problems and emergencies rather than positive development. Some people think it is harmful to individuals and to society. v. 7
It is true that impact of media on society has increased colossally over the last decade. Some people argue that reporting emergencies and crisis in media has many demerits and it adversely affects the society. However, I partially agree with the given argument, because as the media act as a source of information, it should provide all sorts of news including the developments as well as problems happening. To begin with, the role of television and newspaper in the modern society has become inevitable. Media provides information about the happenings around the world and it creates awareness among the society. Moreover, whenever a crisis occurs, telecasting the emergency situations on the media is vital, as it informs and warns the public about the causes and harmful effects, so that effective measures could be taken at the earliest stage to avoid the spread of causes. For instance, during the spread of pandemic disease COVID- 19 and other natural disasters, the media play a significant role in generating awareness among the common people, thus the people could take the necessary actions in advance to protect themselves from the crisis. On the other hand, the necessity of reporting the developments in the country is indispensable. It is useful as it informs people about the developments and progress made in the country. In addition, news about the positive aspects encourage people as well as motivate them to achieve more for the welfare of the country as well as themselves. In conclusion, the media plays a significant role in the society in providing information about the happenings around the world, which includes both the positive developments and emergency conditions.
It is true that impact of
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media
on
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society
has increased
colossally
over the last decade.
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Some
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people
argue that reporting emergencies and crisis in
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media
has
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many
demerits and it
adversely
affects the
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society
.
However
, I
partially
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agree
with the
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given
argument,
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because
as the
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media
act as a source of information, it should provide all sorts of news including the
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developments
as well
as problems happening.

To
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begin
with, the role of television and newspaper in the modern
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society
has become inevitable.
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Media
provides information about the happenings around the world and it creates awareness among the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
society
.
Moreover
, whenever a crisis occurs, telecasting the emergency situations on the
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media
is vital, as it informs and warns the public about the causes and harmful effects,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
that effective measures could
be taken
at the earliest stage to avoid the spread of causes.
For instance
, during the spread of pandemic disease
Did you mean "COVID-19" or the alternative spelling "Covid-19" (= coronavirus)?
COVID
- 19 and other natural disasters, the
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media
play a significant role in generating awareness among the common
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people
,
thus
the
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people
could take the necessary actions in advance to protect themselves from the crisis.

On the other hand
, the necessity of reporting the
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developments
in the country is indispensable. It is useful as it informs
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people
about the
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developments
and progress made in the country.
In addition
, news about the
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
positive
aspects encourage
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people
as well
as motivate them to achieve more for the welfare of the country
as well
as themselves.

In conclusion
, the
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media
plays a significant role in the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
society
in providing information about the happenings around the world, which includes both the
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
positive
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
developments
and emergency conditions.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Nowadays, there is a trend that reports of media focus on problems and emergencies rather than positive development. Some people think it is harmful to individuals and to society. v. 7

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
274 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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